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Array ( [sid] => 157631 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => the gun [time] => 2010-02-20 17:33:07 [hometext] => [bodytext] => they corralled him again
from the

wide open ground
of the school yard.

he pleads to others
who
don't look
don't listen.

a faint line of purple and blue
under his eye

unhealed
from the last.

that sick feeling again.

words hit
before the physical.

it won't get any better
it can't get any worse.

with nothing left inside

he opens
his coat.
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the gun

Contributed by dirk-velvet on Saturday, 20th February 2010 @ 05:33:07 PM in AEST
Topic: oops

they corralled him again
from the

wide open ground
of the school yard.

he pleads to others
who
don't look
don't listen.

a faint line of purple and blue
under his eye

unhealed
from the last.

that sick feeling again.

words hit
before the physical.

it won't get any better
it can't get any worse.

with nothing left inside

he opens
his coat.

Copyright Â© dirk-velvet ... [ 2010-02-20 17:33:07]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: the gun (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 28th March 2010 @ 06:38:59 AM AEST
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Okay. The first time I read this, I just sat here with my mouth agape, in stunned admiration, not knowing what the heck to say. This is such a sad state of affairs, and most would turn a blind eye to the problems of our troubled youth, but the truth is, this happens. And it shouldn't. Your write makes me feel so mournful for the loss of innocence. They say childhood is the best time of our lives, but for some, it is a hell that no one should have to endure. There has GOT to be answers. Very provocative write. Excellent post.

Seléne ~

Re: the gun (User Rating: 1 )
by ming on Friday, 10th September 2010 @ 10:35:50 AM AEST
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I saw EVERY school shooting in my minds eye as I read this. This line popped;

'with nothing left inside

he opens
his coat.'

ming

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