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soul windows
Contributed by
ming
on
Tuesday, 17th November 2009 @ 07:50:35 PM in AEST
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abstract
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blink they come
like birds through
open window
almost accidently
when all should
be free to soar
wink closed
picking dead
birds from my
introspection(floor)
shock wide
the atrocities
come in see me
broken-winged &
scuttling across
this integral part
this vital core
this page.
Copyright ©
ming
... [
2009-11-17 19:50:35] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: soul windows
(User Rating: 1 ) by lesoleilnoire on
Tuesday, 17th November 2009 @ 08:37:15 PM AEST (User
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I love this poem. Very creative! Great use of the birds as a simile here also.
Heidi |
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Re: soul windows
(User Rating: 1 ) by northernlights on
Tuesday, 17th November 2009 @ 08:39:03 PM AEST (User
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great imagery esp broken winged and scuttling across the floor can hear and see the injured bird and feel the injured soul |
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Re: soul windows
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 18th November 2009 @ 04:41:56 AM AEST (User
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Superb use of imagery and metaphor. A really vivid, creative poem!
-Phil |
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Re: soul windows
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorguesMatter on
Tuesday, 24th November 2009 @ 07:46:55 AM AEST (User
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I can see the stone house of grey with it's windows like cathedrals and the black birds crippled on the unpolished wooden floor.Great depiction-Morgues |
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Re: soul windows
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 24th November 2009 @ 03:52:55 PM AEST (User
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fabulous!
hugs n' love nessa |
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