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The Scythe
Contributed by
laststarontheleft
on
Tuesday, 17th November 2009 @ 06:58:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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What dark and wicked soul is this
To hold me down so tightly
Choking me with arid breath
And beatless heart
It's eyes so black and empty
Cackling at my distress
Shere weight bears down upon my chest
Beneath, the ground becomes me
Devours me to dust
Never to return again, I am nothing
The cold edge of the scythe's blade
Spared no single grain
All gone, no trace
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laststarontheleft
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2009-11-17 06:58:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: The Scythe
(User Rating: 1 ) by northernlights on
Tuesday, 17th November 2009 @ 10:13:57 AM AEST (User
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very atmospheric and dark love the imagery |
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Re: The Scythe
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th November 2009 @ 01:58:15 PM AEST (User
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Some great imagery, especially:
'Shere weight bears down upon my chest
Beneath, the ground becomes me
Devours me to dust'
I thought 'Devours me to dust' was an excellent turn of phrase.
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Re: The Scythe
(User Rating: 1 ) by MoonlightKiss on
Friday, 20th November 2009 @ 09:31:40 AM AEST (User
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i love the darkness of this poem!
great imagery as said above
interesting rhyming scheme :) |
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Re: The Scythe
(User Rating: 1 ) by ChaosFactor on
Sunday, 3rd January 2010 @ 08:23:25 PM AEST (User
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Such an interesting poem.. Particularly the darkness. I like it, yes yes!! =]
Take care. |
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Re: The Scythe
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 14th January 2010 @ 05:29:26 AM AEST (User
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I've seen this beast more than I can bare,this soulsless abyss In a surge so violent it comes Each time stealing a part of you attempting to break you This passage is morosly vivid almost like looking death in it's eyes Honorable experience
D.Truth |
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