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it seems pointless to cry
Effort overpowers the outcome
Everybody dies

Unrecognizable reflection staring at me
Can't reach that deep within
To find remnants of what I used to be
Or even remember where I've been

Blurry visions of someone great
Clearly lifeless young yet old
I wonder Could I have your autograph
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The Inevitable

Contributed by Amarillys on Thursday, 24th September 2009 @ 07:37:29 PM in AEST
Topic: SadPoetry

Sometimes I am so sad
it seems pointless to cry
Effort overpowers the outcome
Everybody dies

Unrecognizable reflection staring at me
Can't reach that deep within
To find remnants of what I used to be
Or even remember where I've been

Blurry visions of someone great
Clearly lifeless young yet old
I wonder Could I have your autograph
Sadly it's the end of the show

Copyright © Amarillys ... [ 2009-09-24 19:37:29]
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Re: The Inevitable (User Rating: 1 )
by SmokinJoeEvil on Friday, 25th September 2009 @ 07:58:43 AM AEST
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The use of the themes of life a death are used a bit clumsily here, in my opinion. With the last two lines of the first stanza, I would have taken the "outcome" to be referring to death, since the next line is "Everybody dies"... but what "Effort" is there that can over-power death?

And in the end, the term "lifeless" usually refers to something without life. Of course, the term "life" is used to denote more than just the condition of living... such as the condition within which someone is living (social standing or good-naturedness, for instance)... but here it just seems like the meaning is lost - almost as if you meant something else, like "timeless" - with the description of someone appearing "young yet old".

The third stanza also seems to diverge from the feelings presented in the first. The focus seems to shift to someone else entirely, and it isn't clear why there would be so much sadness and confusion, and whether or not the person brought up in the third stanza has anything to do with it or not. Unless it is supposed to be that the third stanza still does describe the same person - some sad, confused person behind a facade of greatness or something. But I don't really feel there is enough "glue" in this to hold that theory together. I guess I'm just saying I came away from the poem rather confused.

Re: The Inevitable (User Rating: 1 )
by AngelFox on Friday, 25th September 2009 @ 09:02:43 AM AEST
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Beautifully written! We become nostalgic sometimes and go back those memories that we relate to. Remembering fragments of greatness and achievement is the theme here. It's a search for that great person inside. I cant wait till that person comes out!!!

Re: The Inevitable (User Rating: 1 )
by musicrox13 on Friday, 25th September 2009 @ 04:10:40 PM AEST
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I loved it! you are a wicked awsome poet! :)

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