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now that you're gone
i can't concentrate
never sleep
always cry
my heart is aching
my soul shaking
all i can feel
cold
pain
anger
why did you have to go
you did as you were told
ate your vegetables
didn't smoke
didn't drink
but your stomach ached
you lost weight
the doctors said said cancer
and my heart broke
days went by
and they sighed
said there's nothing to do
time stood still
until that fateful day
when the phone call came
my body went numb
as i fell to the floor
my mind went black
the world left it's orbit
and you were gone
along with my smile
so i just sit here
thinking i've died
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Black

Contributed by karoody on Sunday, 30th March 2003 @ 12:35:00 PM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry

nothing's the same
now that you're gone
i can't concentrate
never sleep
always cry
my heart is aching
my soul shaking
all i can feel
cold
pain
anger
why did you have to go
you did as you were told
ate your vegetables
didn't smoke
didn't drink
but your stomach ached
you lost weight
the doctors said said cancer
and my heart broke
days went by
and they sighed
said there's nothing to do
time stood still
until that fateful day
when the phone call came
my body went numb
as i fell to the floor
my mind went black
the world left it's orbit
and you were gone
along with my smile
so i just sit here
thinking i've died

Copyright © karoody ... [ 2003-03-30 12:35:00]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Black (User Rating: 1 )
by Ilhar on Sunday, 30th March 2003 @ 03:48:23 PM AEST
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very sad, your sense of loss so evident,, but with love they are always with you
Sharon

Re: Black (User Rating: 1 )
by Fudge on Sunday, 30th March 2003 @ 05:23:41 PM AEST
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a very sad but good poem. i like how you wrote it, straight to the point, simple yet effective.

Re: Black (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Sunday, 30th March 2003 @ 09:55:19 PM AEST
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(((((Kara)))))

Re: Black (User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on Monday, 31st March 2003 @ 02:36:06 AM AEST
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acquiring maturity of poetic expression with good images.. well done.. venkat

Re: Black (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 31st March 2003 @ 05:43:39 AM AEST
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Losing someone close can be so painful. I know how you feel. The way you have expressed your emotions in heart warming. Great poem!!

sleepless_siren

Re: Black (User Rating: 1 )
by Feelin_Like_A_SadFellow on Monday, 31st March 2003 @ 01:14:20 PM AEST
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i mourn with you in your lost the flow of the words seems to come naturally from your hand

Re: Black (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_Kalicharan on Tuesday, 1st April 2003 @ 10:06:02 PM AEST
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Well written, Kara.. your pain is so evident...
Hugs
Jenni

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