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Are You Happy?
Contributed by
the_unknown
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Tuesday, 28th July 2009 @ 11:40:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Can my poison slither
Through your veins?
Can I stop your breathing?
Hang my by a noose;
One created from your fears.
Collect your agreements,
But don't pass Go.
Darling you're laying next to me.
Could I stop your breathing?
Are you happy, now?
You got what you wanted.
Ten thousand cuts,
But you left me beating.
Inside me there's a place
You can call your home...
Your words crawl out your mouth
And spill into my ears.
I can feel you in my skin.
I can taste you on my lips.
Eyes burned black,
No portrait of beauty here.
Are you happy?
I'm drowning in the air,
I'm being crushed under the distance.
If we weren't dying,
Everyone would be jealous.
So, are you happy?
Can you breathe?
I swear,
Everyone would be jealous!
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Re: Are You Happy?
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 29th July 2009 @ 02:30:44 AM AEST
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The question about stopping the breathing is kind of scary. And if it is about how vulnerable we are when we are asleep it's even more scary.
The lines that really spoke to me though and gave me some eerie images was:
Your words crawl out your mouth
And spill into my ears |
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Re: Are You Happy?
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 29th July 2009 @ 09:28:39 AM AEST
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Wow I felt the heat in this one.
Yes I agree with above comment about sleeping lol.... that spooked me a bit.
Intense write!
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Re: Are You Happy?
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by razorbladekisses on
Wednesday, 29th July 2009 @ 10:13:26 AM AEST
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Dark... I agree with the people before me, the question about the breathing is kind of creepy.
I liked it though.
Hang me by a noose;
One created from your fears.
Those lines stood out to me.
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Re: Are You Happy?
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 13th October 2009 @ 07:36:43 PM AEST
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Well great writing, girl.
I didn't take the can I stop you breathing like every one else. I took it kindda like can I take your breath, In other words like when you remember luv making does it take you breath when you remember.
Luv ya,
emy |
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