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Unveil The Truth
Contributed by
Fudge
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Friday, 28th March 2003 @ 06:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Like twisted vines on ancient trees,
And thick dark storms and raging seas,
And clouds with warm sunrays aloft,
So effervescent, calm and soft.
What's emanating from this scene,
Perceived as tranquil and serene,
Is a subconscious delusion,
Brewing in thoughts of confusion.
The truth that's hidden, you will find,
If you read between the lines.
Reality cast behind a veil,
So no one knows within is frail,
And nothing's really what it seems,
Except for what is seen in dreams.
But the ancient trees won't live forever,
And the twisted vines will wane and wither.
The thick darm storms and raging seas
Will calm down and be put at ease.
The clouds will lift, unveil the sun,
And what binds the past will be undone.
Copyright ©
Fudge
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2003-03-28 18:05:00]
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Re: Unveil The Truth
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by juliette on
Friday, 28th March 2003 @ 06:11:46 PM AEST
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I wouldn't change one thing about this poem! I love the title, the words, the whole idea behind it. A perfect write........Thanks for sharing!
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Re: Unveil The Truth
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by SmokinJoeEvil on
Friday, 28th March 2003 @ 06:15:14 PM AEST
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| It reads really well... but what I didn't understand was how one could perceive "thick dark storms" and "raging seas" as something "tranquil and serene". Clouds and warm sunrays maybe... but there doesn't seem to be distinction as to how much of the first 4 lines are considered the tranquil and serene scene. |
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Re: Unveil The Truth
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by Fudge on
Saturday, 29th March 2003 @ 09:09:25 AM AEST
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| thanks for commenting. good that you pointed that bit out about the storm and raging sea. it was one of those poems i sit down and just write without thinking and it just comes out on paper. it took me a long time to figure out why i wrote it and what it means. sometimes it takes me 12 months to figure out my poems because i just write. but even though i dont make sense sometimes, i'd rather not change it because thats' how it came out. but you sure have a good point! |
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