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[aid] => mick
[title] => Where Did You Go?
[time] => 2009-05-06 20:45:37
[hometext] => I wrote this for a class and I want feedback please. Negative, positive, let me have it. Thanks.
[bodytext] => Where Did You Go? I dreamed of you again like I have before. It is the only way I can see you now. We were always supposed to be together. I thought we always would be. In my dreams you talk to me like we used to. We walked through the clouds and you told me it was just a lie. It was all a joke. But it wasn’t a joke. You left me and I’m still not over you. I don’t think I will ever be over you. We were best friends. Sometimes I can feel you watching over me or I can even feel you beside be. But it’s just my wishful thinking. If I didn’t imagine you by me at times I may not make it through. When you left I thought it was my fault. What could I have done differently? It took me a while to realize it was out of my hands. It was your decisions that led to this. If I were there that night maybe I’d be gone too; or you’d still be here. But I can’t think like that. It makes the pain worse, unbearable at times because you were selfish. And ***** you for leaving me. You left way too soon. You left before we got to live. Why did you have to drink that much that night? Why couldn’t you catch a ride? You should have been more careful. You put me through so much for months after. You made my tears come heavy and often. The drinks I drank to ease the pain only made it worse. I remember seeing you on that cold day they out you both in the ground. My friends, two of the best a guy could have had were no longer with me. I didn’t tell you good bye that day. Good bye makes things real and I didn’t want you to go. You made me believe in heaven a little more. Without it I’d never see you again so it gives me hope. That hope keeps me going and it keeps you with me. A month after you wrecked so did I. I had been drinking too. I was drinking the pain away but it didn’t work. It never did. I ran off the road and right before I hit that tree, I saw you. If you saved me that night, thank you. I only wish I could have saved you. Maybe I was just drunk. For a few months I always was. I was so empty because it still didn’t feel real. It had to be a dream. I missed you so much and I still do. I always will. Even if just for a second, I still think of you every day. I always will. I see your faces, hear your voices, and I feel your light. When I feel you watching over me I can feel you cheering for me. If we do see each other again I wonder about many things. Will you have aged? Will you still be in your twenties when I’m older? Will you remember me? I hope you do. I never got to tell you those three words, those three words I can’t say to you. [comments] => 1 [counter] => 178 [topic] => 39 [informant] => MikeyMike [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 0 [associated] => [topicname] => Grief )
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