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Array ( [sid] => 149384 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Aving it large!! - hyper night [time] => 2009-04-25 04:21:20 [hometext] => To be read fast with no mistakes! All critisism welcome! [bodytext] => Smoke weed, take speed, drink absinth, give a girl a wink, don’t think, mix your drink, green out and be sick – do it all in the time it takes to blink – fall asleep – deep – don’t follow the crowd like a sheep, wake up in a messed up heap, meet and greet, wine and dine, take your time – I don’t care what I wear, wear and tear, now and then, yet again, separate the boys from the men, Zen – take a look, write a book, get hungry and cook, eat your dinner, out the window see a minger, ginger, up goes the middle finger, lurk about and linger, deep thinker – sniff a line, feel sublime, commit a crime, feeling fine, at home, all alone, look after your own, answer the phone, talk, take a walk, then back to your gaff, in a street full of chavs – getting to hot, take off your top, spill a drink, go get the mop - see me I’m going to the top!

A story of a boy who couldn’t stop!
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Aving it large!! - hyper night

Contributed by thezenmonkey on Saturday, 25th April 2009 @ 04:21:20 AM in AEST
Topic: drugabuse

Smoke weed, take speed, drink absinth, give a girl a wink, don’t think, mix your drink, green out and be sick – do it all in the time it takes to blink – fall asleep – deep – don’t follow the crowd like a sheep, wake up in a messed up heap, meet and greet, wine and dine, take your time – I don’t care what I wear, wear and tear, now and then, yet again, separate the boys from the men, Zen – take a look, write a book, get hungry and cook, eat your dinner, out the window see a minger, ginger, up goes the middle finger, lurk about and linger, deep thinker – sniff a line, feel sublime, commit a crime, feeling fine, at home, all alone, look after your own, answer the phone, talk, take a walk, then back to your gaff, in a street full of chavs – getting to hot, take off your top, spill a drink, go get the mop - see me I’m going to the top!

A story of a boy who couldn’t stop!

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Re: Aving it large!! - hyper night (User Rating: 1 )
by juricajo on Saturday, 25th April 2009 @ 06:56:53 AM AEST
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liked this poem, you should set it out differentley ie: smoke weed, take speed
drink absinth, give a girl a wink
dont think
mix your drink.......
and so on.

Re: Aving it large!! - hyper night (User Rating: 1 )
by Matariel on Saturday, 25th April 2009 @ 06:03:12 PM AEST
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Okay, some constructive criticism. I have no idea what "aving" means, and I don't really understand the title. Also, I didn't like the paragraph form instead of separating it into separate lines. I felt it lost some of its poetical effect because of this.

I did like the attitude it projected, similar to the attitude I used in my poem, I'm not a Hero (I'm a Hellion).

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