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[aid] => mick
[title] => Patriotic Sin
[time] => 2009-03-26 14:57:21
[hometext] => There still seems to be so much war in the world.To all the warmongers out there, read and think on this a while.I could have put this in the war poetry section but I think it's more fitting here, it's sad this has to happen
[bodytext] => Hear the beat of battle drum, of fanfare bugled proud
Hail the path of glory that is programmed in the mind
Sign the dotted line, for country and for honour
Commandment of thou shalt not kill is twisted by command
Generals murder generalise,plant heroism seed
Rhetoric their bullets spewed,from havens concrete walled
Pushing pawns on fields of valour, moves to counter moves
Death is born from tabletop, viewed and then reviewed
Note the slain no more than numbers, puppets to the sword
Living under propoganda, minds accepting all
Count the lines of bloodwashed heroes never to return
Count the cost they never see, too blind to broken lives
When what remains is just remains,the hallowed cause is lost
This feast of war spits out the bones, yet this is all conceived
Are we not one, despite our race our colour or belief ?
We should not yield to those who force this patriotic sin
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[ratings] => 2
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Patriotic Sin
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puppy_dog_eyes
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Thursday, 26th March 2009 @ 02:57:21 PM in AEST
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Hear the beat of battle drum, of fanfare bugled proud
Hail the path of glory that is programmed in the mind
Sign the dotted line, for country and for honour
Commandment of thou shalt not kill is twisted by command
Generals murder generalise,plant heroism seed
Rhetoric their bullets spewed,from havens concrete walled
Pushing pawns on fields of valour, moves to counter moves
Death is born from tabletop, viewed and then reviewed
Note the slain no more than numbers, puppets to the sword
Living under propoganda, minds accepting all
Count the lines of bloodwashed heroes never to return
Count the cost they never see, too blind to broken lives
When what remains is just remains,the hallowed cause is lost
This feast of war spits out the bones, yet this is all conceived
Are we not one, despite our race our colour or belief ?
We should not yield to those who force this patriotic sin
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Re: Patriotic Sin
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by KatsMeow on
Thursday, 26th March 2009 @ 05:59:22 PM AEST
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| This is a very strong poem that obviously stems from deep felt beliefs. War may help with the economy or in freeing peoples, but the cost is ever high...very sad. Well done! |
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Re: Patriotic Sin
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by shelby on
Thursday, 26th March 2009 @ 08:54:04 PM AEST
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You said what I never can put into proper words like this. Incredible write, strong, thought provoking and truthful. Not to mention well written. I wish my friend the wars would end and life would be peaceful and calm once more also.
Michelle
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Re: Patriotic Sin
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 26th March 2009 @ 09:19:20 PM AEST
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Great to see you posting again, Steve... and with such a compelling piece... Great work...
Jenni |
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Re: Patriotic Sin
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by emystar on
Thursday, 26th March 2009 @ 10:12:47 PM AEST
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I hear ya friend.
I've often wondered why the USA has to take the title of super powers when there's plenty here on the home front that needs their attention. That don't make any sense at all to me. They could use some of the money they are using to re build things in bag dad etc. or where ever they are.
Good write dear, dear friend.
luv, huggs, blessings,
emy |
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Re: Patriotic Sin
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by venkat on
Friday, 27th March 2009 @ 06:43:44 AM AEST
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wonderful title..wonderful lines..
"Are we not one, despite our race our colour or belief ?" yes...yes..we are one humanity.
Agents of death are the rulers of the world..therefore "Death is born from tabletop".
Excellent poem.. venkat
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Re: Patriotic Sin
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 15th April 2009 @ 10:55:18 PM AEST
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This is an Excellent poem. Should have sent this to Bush when he was president.
Also what happened to "Love thy Neighbour?'
Again a great write, awesome and powerful! |
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Re: Patriotic Sin
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by Lionel on
Monday, 4th July 2011 @ 11:05:50 PM AEST
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| In most, I agree, Patriotic sin. In rare case, freedom. I particularly liked: Watercolored Life, and Blind in Utopia. You are more gifted in expression than I. I, possibly, in more simple ryme. We agree, I'm sure, that America shouldn't be the world's policeman. |
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Re: Patriotic Sin
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by cynicalgiraffe on
Saturday, 29th October 2011 @ 12:58:58 AM AEST
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| I really liked this one. I thought this poem paralleled patriotism with violence. I think marx once said it was religion that was the opium of the masses. Forgive if I got my quote wrong. I digress, your poem made me feel as if patriotism can be the opium of the masses. It also reminded of Achilles and a passage in "The Odyssey". I think this passage was when odysseus was talking to achilles in the underworld. Achilles the great hero admits to Odysseus that living as even a slave is better then ruling over all the dead as a hero. Your lines about the hero not even getting to see the benefits of his sacrifice brought this to mind. Very insightful. However, I am still grateful for those willing to sacrifice for the rights of many. I realize thats very American to say, but maybe nonetheless true. Anyways your poem made me think new thoughts on patriotism and for that I am grateful. |
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