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on the toilet, pants down
below his knees head smashing
against cracked floor tiles.

Other times strapped to a
sterile hospital bed
three weeks suffering
tubes in every known orifice
of his frail old body, praying
for death to take him.

Depends on my mood
How and when it happens.
Cause it’s my poem,
I’m God here the boss
the head honcho.
Something he said I’d never be.
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Killing the old man

Contributed by fanniesson on Friday, 13th March 2009 @ 01:32:10 PM in AEST
Topic: MiscPoems



Sometimes the old man dies fast
on the toilet, pants down
below his knees head smashing
against cracked floor tiles.

Other times strapped to a
sterile hospital bed
three weeks suffering
tubes in every known orifice
of his frail old body, praying
for death to take him.

Depends on my mood
How and when it happens.
Cause it’s my poem,
I’m God here the boss
the head honcho.
Something he said I’d never be.




Copyright © fanniesson ... [ 2009-03-13 13:32:10]
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Re: Killing the old man (User Rating: 1 )
by simsalabim on Friday, 13th March 2009 @ 09:32:00 PM AEST
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wow....vivid...and descriptive....i appreciate it...


Re: Killing the old man (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Saturday, 14th March 2009 @ 06:23:51 AM AEST
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It can't be easy making beautiful poetry with such realistic imagery. In my opinion you did just that.
A nice twist at the end to.
Excellent!


Re: Killing the old man (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Saturday, 14th March 2009 @ 04:03:29 PM AEST
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interesting, good writing.

-phil


Re: Killing the old man (User Rating: 1 )
by ScorpionFire88 on Monday, 16th March 2009 @ 11:51:53 PM AEST
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shocking, and brutal. Magnificent.




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