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[title] => Who was there at the beginning?
[time] => 2009-03-03 23:15:53
[hometext] => I know who you are and what you did but you don't know who was I
[bodytext] => * * *
Neither there was non-reality nor reality then
Neither there was air nor sky nor stars and
Nothing beyond it, what covered in and where?
Was there water fathomless deep in the void?
Neither the death nor any life immortal existed
Neither of night nor of a day was there any sign;
The ONE breathed, airless,by only self-impulse?
He was the Absolute existence before creation
In Him existed the puissant mind and His Will;
His first desire was like a seed of life emitted light
The beams arose up and down and to all corners
Then from His breath emerged the eternal sound
AUM like a sweet musical tone pervaded all over void
Then the Lord Eternal rose up to begin Creation
* * *
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[counter] => 252
[topic] => 49
[informant] => venkat
[notes] => Edited by Mod_11
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[score] => 35
[ratings] => 7
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[topicname] => mystical
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Who was there at the beginning?
Contributed by
venkat
on
Tuesday, 3rd March 2009 @ 11:15:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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* * *
Neither there was non-reality nor reality then
Neither there was air nor sky nor stars and
Nothing beyond it, what covered in and where?
Was there water fathomless deep in the void?
Neither the death nor any life immortal existed
Neither of night nor of a day was there any sign;
The ONE breathed, airless,by only self-impulse?
He was the Absolute existence before creation
In Him existed the puissant mind and His Will;
His first desire was like a seed of life emitted light
The beams arose up and down and to all corners
Then from His breath emerged the eternal sound
AUM like a sweet musical tone pervaded all over void
Then the Lord Eternal rose up to begin Creation
* * *
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venkat
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2009-03-03 23:15:53]
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Re: Who was there at the beginning?
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th March 2009 @ 01:07:13 AM AEST
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Wow, you have created an incredible and vivid poem (or story) about the dawn of creation. All this creation about creation is very inspiring. Beautifully written and this had me smiling from beginning to end.
It is very nice to see you posting again. Hope to see more.
Thank you for a wonderful read.
Tim
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Re: Who was there at the beginning?
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 4th March 2009 @ 03:44:46 PM AEST
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Ahh... as soon as I came on site, I began smiling...cuz I saw that you had posted... Good to see you back... a lovely creation..
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Who was there at the beginning?
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 4th March 2009 @ 05:34:04 PM AEST
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I found few lapses happened in this posting.
In the title "at beginning" shall be read as "at the beginning"
In the text of the poem last two lines are just written only to conclude the poem..
but in fact many things happened before the beginning of creation..
if the God permits me I will have to continue this story by writing another 5 poems
till the creation of Gods ( the principal truths ) and manifestation of the Universe..
O.k. thank you friends..you have passed very nice and valuable comments.:-) venkat |
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Re: Who was there at the beginning?
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th March 2009 @ 11:48:19 PM AEST
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what a beautiful work! This was impossibly inspiring. There is a softness here
that makes me want to lie down inside the piece. You've given us such a wonderful
gift. The gift of a glimpse into what it was like when it all began. Magical and
mysteriously charming. The cosmos holds a special fascination for me. And
with this piece, it has just become that much more.
Thank you for this. :) Wonderful work!
~ Breezy
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Re: Who was there at the beginning?
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th March 2009 @ 02:29:23 PM AEST
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I am amazed at how so few words can delve to such great depths.
well done my friend. |
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Re: Who was there at the beginning?
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by kye on
Friday, 6th March 2009 @ 06:49:43 PM AEST
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Oh Venkat, you have been inspired.
It is beautiful, very deep and in a realm of wise spirituality.
I absolutely loved-
"The beams arose up and down and to all corners
Then from His breath emerged the eternal sound
AUM like a sweet musical tone pervaded all over void"
You grabbed my imagination and heart and I have to say this one is really wonderful Venkat.
I hope you will continue this..... it is phenomenal.
Kie ***** |
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Re: Who was there at the beginning?
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by myheartsvoice on
Saturday, 7th March 2009 @ 02:06:54 PM AEST
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A glorious piece of writting, thank you
for the joy of it's sharing . . .
ty also 4 your read . . .
Ben |
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