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Climbin' A Mountain
Contributed by
MoonlightKiss
on
Wednesday, 25th February 2009 @ 12:27:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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It's like climbin' a mountain
In the pouring rain
Keep strugglin' and pushin'
Tryin' and tryin' in vain
Cold and crying
Keep slippin' father down
And if you don't listen
I think I'm gonna drown!
It's like it doesn't matter what I do
You won't believe me; I can't get through
This is reoccuring; over and over again
Surprising that I still have strength to let you in
It's like a game to see how much I can hurt
Thought this would be easy, but now there's mud
Instead of dirt...
It's like climbin' a mountain
In a raging storm
And as I get halfway up
I see your shapeless form
Just barely a shadow
But now I'm no longer lost
So I'll keep climbin' this mountain
And I'll keep my fingers crossed.
Copyright ©
MoonlightKiss
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2009-02-25 12:27:11] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Climbin' A Mountain
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th February 2009 @ 01:14:55 PM AEST (User
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I guess we all struggle to hang on
Sooner or later everybody lose the grip and slip
But even when you have fallen down
You have to get back up
Keep on trying!
Keep on climbing!
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Re: Climbin' A Mountain
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th February 2009 @ 07:42:29 AM AEST (User
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the metaphor you used was superb, it really worked well. the imagery was also top class. a very good poem.
-phil |
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Re: Climbin' A Mountain
(User Rating: 1 ) by ItsMeNow on
Thursday, 26th February 2009 @ 12:35:37 PM AEST (User
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I liked this poem it rhymed well and I could relate to the message. Good write. |
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