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lost in a dream
Contributed by
spooky
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Thursday, 18th December 2008 @ 05:03:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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yesterday i was lost in a dream,
that i thought no one could change,
i knew that part of me was still in the past,
being there as if it were yesterday,
i knew that i could never see this person,
time had taken us away,
i knew that i could say what i wanted,
but it was for me to hold,
i held on to my dreams,
i held on to a heart,
i held on to the thought,
that maybe i would find her,
i was wrong, i never did,
but she did,
there is so much for me to say,
there is so much i would want to show her,
but time has made us better people,
for maybe then we wouldn't be the people we are now,
time has touched us once again,
and i pray that she will be there for me as much as i want to be there for her,
time has touched us both, and i thank you for this,
for finding me once again,
craig s. meeks
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Re: lost in a dream
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th December 2008 @ 06:46:16 PM AEST (User
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touching write, great work.
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Re: lost in a dream
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 18th December 2008 @ 08:50:23 PM AEST (User
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Aww this is wonderful! It is so good to read some happy stuff.. Good to read you again,, my friend..
Jenni |
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Re: lost in a dream
(User Rating: 1 ) by Mars on
Thursday, 18th December 2008 @ 09:38:55 PM AEST (User
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Very nice; almost makes me remember the dream I never had... Also, I think that it was a very good idea to have to many words on the last stanza, line 2 (of the stanza). Did a great job in choosing just how many words to place to get the idea across, but not overwhelm us by too much of a run-on. Overall, nice job =). |
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