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and the ten commandments guide what you say and do
If you still bow your head when someone prays
and you put your hand over your heart when our anthem plays
If you treat vietnam vets with the respect they have earned
and you feel a little loss with each flag thats burned
If your integrity is stronger than your desire to decieve
and you raise your children to fight for what the believe
If you have given your last dollar to a stranger or a friend
and you cease every day untill your days come to an end
If you fight for whats right every night and day
and you believe oboma is a threat to the american way
If you have bleed for your rights and do all that you can
Then you just might be and american woman or man [comments] => 4 [counter] => 239 [topic] => 28 [informant] => rebelwcause [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 16 [ratings] => 4 [editpoem] => 0 [associated] => [topicname] => Patriotic )

American

Contributed by rebelwcause on Monday, 20th October 2008 @ 05:18:11 PM in AEST
Topic: Patriotic

If the thought of one nation under god does not offend you
and the ten commandments guide what you say and do
If you still bow your head when someone prays
and you put your hand over your heart when our anthem plays
If you treat vietnam vets with the respect they have earned
and you feel a little loss with each flag thats burned
If your integrity is stronger than your desire to decieve
and you raise your children to fight for what the believe
If you have given your last dollar to a stranger or a friend
and you cease every day untill your days come to an end
If you fight for whats right every night and day
and you believe oboma is a threat to the american way
If you have bleed for your rights and do all that you can
Then you just might be and american woman or man

Copyright © rebelwcause ... [ 2008-10-20 17:18:11]
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Re: American (User Rating: 1 )
by outlawpoet on Monday, 20th October 2008 @ 05:29:35 PM AEST
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great write great thoughts way to put it all togeather

Re: American (User Rating: 1 )
by high_on_duct_tape on Monday, 20th October 2008 @ 06:15:01 PM AEST
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Let me comment on this in two ways:

Firstly, as a poem. Proofread. The number of errors you made is rediculous ("oboma", "decieve", "what the believe", "ight", etc.).

Furthermore, this poem has no build. It is a laundry list of qualifications. It tells no story, looks to no higher calling, doesn't address impression; essentially, it is barely a poem. Why write this? Give it as a speech to yourself in the mirror, don't pretend it's a poem.

Secondly, I will address your perspective. Your granfalloonery is truly impressive (I can define that if you want me to). The notion that everyone should believe in a Judeo-Christian religion is offensive.

Finally, Obama. I do not like Obama. He is severely flawed. But to say that Obama is a threat to the American way and McCain isn't is absolutely rediculous. I can again clarify if you so desire, but I would think it fairly apparent. The most moving part of this campaign for me was when Gov. Huckabee was brought nearly to tears as he explained how significant it was in his mind, having grown up in a particularly racist part of the South, that he could disagree with Obama on his views, and not discredit him as "unamerican" or result to such bigotry. Take a lesson from him. Grow up. And please, for everyone's sake, if that's as deep as your politics go, don't vote.

Re: American (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Monday, 20th October 2008 @ 06:38:18 PM AEST
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As far as Huckabee goes, I grew up with him in the Pentecostal religion.
I thought this was a very good write and it really says a lot.
keep up the good writing.
Also every one has an opionion and they pass them out free all day long.
Personally I'm gonna write in Micky Mouse for President, I grew up with him on tv too. That's what I think about this Presidentual election.
Hang tuff, my friend.
huggs, big smiles and proud to be an American irreguardless who wins the race.
emy
Oh yeah, one more thing, You don't have to be a good speller to be a good poet.

Re: American (User Rating: 1 )
by Darin on Monday, 22nd June 2009 @ 07:27:50 PM AEST
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We are all real Americans. I wish more people would express their belief in this country in this way. Good write, keep up the good work!

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