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Array ( [sid] => 145752 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => rip father and me [time] => 2008-10-17 15:45:30 [hometext] => Just a poem about a boy whose father passed. I hope I was able to paint a picture in your mind of the scene that takes place. Your reads and comments would be greatly appreciated [bodytext] => A cigarette is burning in a young man's hand
The other holds the whisky and he can barely stand
The ground is unstable and he is barely able
But he staggers to the grave the home of the late brave
Where his father lays to rest, where his heart reaches out from his chest

He drops a rose on the stone, chases the whisky with a tear
And stumbles away to let his hero rest alone [comments] => 5 [counter] => 356 [topic] => 39 [informant] => rebelwcause [notes] => Edited by Mod_11 for typos. [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 0 [associated] => [topicname] => Grief )

rip father and me

Contributed by rebelwcause on Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 03:45:30 PM in AEST
Topic: Grief

A cigarette is burning in a young man's hand
The other holds the whisky and he can barely stand
The ground is unstable and he is barely able
But he staggers to the grave the home of the late brave
Where his father lays to rest, where his heart reaches out from his chest

He drops a rose on the stone, chases the whisky with a tear
And stumbles away to let his hero rest alone

Copyright © rebelwcause ... [ 2008-10-17 15:45:30]
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Re: rip father and me (User Rating: 1 )
by outlawpoet on Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 03:55:03 PM AEST
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Great write i can tell it is heart felt tou painted a great scene here i felt like i was a bystandard watching this happen great job

Re: rip father and me (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 04:05:59 PM AEST
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Great imagery here... Nicely done...
Welcome to YPDC....
Jenni

Re: rip father and me (User Rating: 1 )
by redsleeve on Saturday, 18th October 2008 @ 06:06:02 PM AEST
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very emotional write, love the imagery.
great post! thanks for sharing

d

Re: rip father and me (User Rating: 1 )
by walsh on Wednesday, 22nd October 2008 @ 07:09:56 PM AEST
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Touching, Beautiful Imagery, This Is An Experience Similiar To My Own, It Brought A Lump To My Throat And A Tear To My Eyes... You Capture The Poignancy Exsquistley.

In A word, Wow

Re: rip father and me (User Rating: 1 )
by Mila on Friday, 24th October 2008 @ 03:22:37 AM AEST
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Very touching!

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