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A payment for pain. What a glorious thing!
Contributed by
LauraMary
on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 10:09:11 AM in AEST
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Meds
meds
meds
take one and two and three
meds
meds
meds
the pills are all for me
meds
meds
meds
feel happy for once in my life
meds
meds
meds
erase pain and take away strife
meds
meds
meds
scribble out words people say
meds
meds
meds
please! never take these away
meds
meds
meds
filling my soul up with glee.
meds
meds
meds
I FEEL FREE in my mind I FEEL FREE
meds
meds
meds
make all the bad guys go away
meds
meds
meds
I'm alone in the stars
here to stay.
Copyright ©
LauraMary
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2008-09-05 10:09:11] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: A payment for pain. What a glorious thing!
(User Rating: 1 ) by allforyou on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 11:16:47 AM AEST (User
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at first i thought the "meds" part was too much, but without it it would be missing something. good write. |
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Re: A payment for pain. What a glorious thing!
(User Rating: 1 ) by wizard on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 11:34:23 AM AEST (User
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nice job...i picture a girl crouched up in a corner biting her nails...reciting this frantically...
great post,
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Re: A payment for pain. What a glorious thing!
(User Rating: 1 ) by high_on_duct_tape on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 04:36:30 PM AEST (User
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This may have worked better if you didn't try so hard to rhyme. It ended up rather awkwardly.
Do well, do good, write on,
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Re: A payment for pain. What a glorious thing!
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th September 2008 @ 04:27:15 PM AEST (User
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" I'm alone in the stars here to stay. "
as good a place as any to be, and i like this
poem it's configuration added to the flow
and completeness of your style, lovely
while intense . . .
Ben . . .
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