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[title] => lonesome poem
[time] => 2008-09-03 14:28:07
[hometext] => ~ trying to buy back pieces of my soul
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~*~
if there ever was a morning when the sun did not rise
wishing my heart a brilliant star not a graveyard of memories
it was beautiful in my past; now nothing seems to last
i am no longer as strong, resources lack my armory
now i reside as a solitary traveler throughout life; time
believes it entwines hours all together with no definition
perception and reason must have have flown out the gate
this unconscious process and lack of cognition
there are tears that you cannot see
i'll never cry in front of me.
§* *§
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lonesome poem
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Wednesday, 3rd September 2008 @ 02:28:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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~*~
if there ever was a morning when the sun did not rise
wishing my heart a brilliant star not a graveyard of memories
it was beautiful in my past; now nothing seems to last
i am no longer as strong, resources lack my armory
now i reside as a solitary traveler throughout life; time
believes it entwines hours all together with no definition
perception and reason must have have flown out the gate
this unconscious process and lack of cognition
there are tears that you cannot see
i'll never cry in front of me.
§* *§
*|*
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2008-09-03 14:28:07]
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Re: lonesome poem
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by Crow on
Wednesday, 3rd September 2008 @ 04:14:34 PM AEST
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| Nessa I`d like to say somethings, but I can`t in this comment box" I can relate well to this write my friend. peace and love to you..and heres my hand" if you ever need it. Lane |
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by Spike on
Wednesday, 3rd September 2008 @ 10:07:43 PM AEST
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Wow - very evocative piece, nessa. beyond sad into the realms of anguish. Life sucks when it isn't good, and resiliant companionship can be so elusive.
feel this one, for sure.
Spike |
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by deadwriter on
Wednesday, 3rd September 2008 @ 10:08:42 PM AEST
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Nessa,
This is so sad for me to read. I wish I had some magical words to make things better, but all I can offer is my friendship and to remind you I am here if you need me.
Deadwriter
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 3rd September 2008 @ 10:34:05 PM AEST
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Oh Nessa, this is painfully beautiful. Your last line is just heart breaking.
Some mornings the sun does not shine and it feels as if the sky mourns
the loss. You captured this melancholy and ache, exceptionally well.
No one should have to travel through life with such a burden. Keep
strong and hold on to all that softens time. Your words are so affecting,
but when released they can serve in survival, no?
Always ... here for you ~
*huge hugs*
@----->---------
~ Breezy
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Re: lonesome poem
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by FRANCO on
Wednesday, 3rd September 2008 @ 11:55:08 PM AEST
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It is a very emotional poem made my heart to sink. in my own tears, though I "never cry in front of me" this line is absolutely touching.
God bless you my friend,
with love and respect,
FRANCO. |
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by wizard on
Thursday, 4th September 2008 @ 02:10:25 AM AEST
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beautifully done,
great post....
wiz |
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Re: lonesome poem
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th September 2008 @ 02:12:06 AM AEST
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| Our soul always grows, no matter how much of it we exchange with others or give away as we go through life. We collect bits from others as well, each person that we touch. You, Nessa have a huge multicolored soul! Never forget that. |
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Re: lonesome poem
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by Dom on
Thursday, 4th September 2008 @ 04:34:58 AM AEST
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As Spike said this is "beyond sad" and into numbness. What I saw when I read this was a lonely soul unable to move forwards but feeling the rest of the world rushing sickeningly around.
I can relate, and hope things improve for you soon.
Hugs
Dom |
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Re: lonesome poem
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 4th September 2008 @ 06:08:02 AM AEST
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Awwww Hun, my heart goes out to you... Such an emotional write as you try to come to terms with this aspect of your life. You have written this poem of loss, alienation and despair with such elegance...
I am just a click away....if you need to talk..
((((((((((Nessa)))))))))))
Jenni |
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Re: lonesome poem
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th September 2008 @ 06:39:23 AM AEST
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Beautifull as always in a
sad and revealing way,
how love can have it's way
with our heart just when we
thought we knew it best,
it proves to us, we knew it
not at all .
Welcome back . . .
((((Nessa))))
Likewise, ty 4 your read
and comment . . .
Ben |
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 4th September 2008 @ 10:06:01 AM AEST
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Nessa,
my sweet dear friend. I
wished so much that I can
put my arms around you and
tell you it's going to be alright.
My friend you have touched the
lives of many and continue to
do so. You are a strong, wonderful,
intelligent and loving person.
You can never keep a strong woman
down. May you never cry tears of
sadness. May your tears be replaced
with such happy moments my dear friend.
A sad and emotional write that hits the
reader straight at the heart.
Wishing you a rainbow of happiness
to arch over you and wash away the
sadness that resides in your heart
my dear friend.
Much love, hugs n prayers,
sue m |
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by eeeitak on
Thursday, 4th September 2008 @ 01:26:20 PM AEST
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wow nessa,
this is beautiful, sad and very touching.
great write :D !
--Katie |
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by emystar on
Thursday, 4th September 2008 @ 03:52:29 PM AEST
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Dear friend,
Looks like everyone else has said it all.
I just want you to know my thoughts-n-prayers are with you.
Great writing as always.
luv, huggs, peace, joy, faith, hope, prayers,
emy |
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by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 9th November 2008 @ 02:39:37 PM AEST
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Excellent Excellent
and you are right nothing seems to last.... |
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Re: lonesome poem
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by colinb on
Saturday, 5th July 2014 @ 03:23:19 AM AEST
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| enougher beautifully written poem |
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Re: lonesome poem
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by Blackheart on
Saturday, 5th July 2014 @ 10:16:33 PM AEST
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This most definitely speaks to me, the alone feeling especially...and you try to stay strong but it's hard, this poem tells me that also. Heart & Soul from beginning to end. Message me anytime you feel this way again and need someone to listen because I'm always willing to do so.
Hugs & love,
Donavan |
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 20th October 2014 @ 09:12:58 AM AEST
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The tears were welling up in my eyes from your description alone. Powerful stuff. This is a well-worded poem that left me with a heartache as well. I wish for you, if nothing else, that you one day find yourself with less of a 'graveyard of memories', and more of a treasure chest of special moments that cannot be taken from you.
~Scorp |
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