|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Blood Burns
Contributed by
eeeitak
on
Wednesday, 27th August 2008 @ 04:33:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
SecretLove
|
I want you to look at me
And like what you see
I want to make heads turn
Hearts race blood burn
I need you to love me
Or at least like what you see
I want to make your blood burn
Heart race head turn
But you’re always looking at her
Eyes glued on her perfect face
What I’d give to be her
I’d kill to take her place
I want you to look at me
And be pleased
I want to make heads turn
Hearts race blood burn
I need you to want me
Or at least make you pleased
I want to make your blood burn
Heart race head turn
But I’m a fool when I’m around you
I’ve never felt this before
I don’t know what to say to you
Cause I know I’ll always love you more
I want you to look at me
And like what you see
I need you to love me
Copyright ©
eeeitak
... [
2008-08-27 16:33:33]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Blood Burns
(User Rating: 1 )
by wizard on
Wednesday, 27th August 2008 @ 09:05:32 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
nice job... a sense of hopelessness comes through this... when the time is right perhaps you'll get your wish,
wiz |
|
|
Re: Blood Burns
(User Rating: 1 )
by navydocny on
Wednesday, 27th August 2008 @ 11:52:05 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Its the needs and the wants that drive us. You show this well.
We all want to be needed and need to be wanted....
Good Job! |
|
|
Re: Blood Burns
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Thursday, 28th August 2008 @ 12:01:00 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I need you to want me
Or at least make you
pleased " this line is
incredible, any one not
wanting you after reading
this poem wouldn't be
human. absolutely beautiful
in an emotionaly compelling
way, a magnificent artist is
what you are . . .
Like wise thank you for
your read and comment . . .
Ben . . .
|
|
|
Re: Blood Burns
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Friday, 29th August 2008 @ 01:31:15 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
The repitition of lines in a poem usually
throw me off, but they've added so much in
your piece, you did it beautifully. There is so
much love and angst in this poem, I don't
know what to do with myself. The fact that
you want him to love you, but will settle to
simply please him, is such a powerful
thought. Great job.
~Jesse |
|
|
Re: Blood Burns
(User Rating: 1 )
by ZiggyB on
Friday, 29th August 2008 @ 10:32:39 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
It's that need...or the search that keeps us going
Nice write. |
|
|
Re: Blood Burns
(User Rating: 1 )
by LauraMary on
Saturday, 30th August 2008 @ 12:51:40 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
You are the worlds best poet.
And every little thing you write is golden.
Yes. |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
