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Let Me
Contributed by
allforyou
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Wednesday, 27th August 2008 @ 12:44:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I'll be your ocean,
if you'll be my sand.
And let my rough waves,
crash on your soft hands.
I'll be your sky,
if you'll be my stars.
This way we'll be close,
even though we're so far.
I'll be your gravity,
if you'll be my rain.
And let me make you,
fall more every day.
I'll be your flame,
if you'll be my spark.
And promise that you'll,
let me burn in you heart.
Copyright ©
allforyou
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2008-08-27 12:44:24]
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Re: Let Me
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by wizard on
Wednesday, 27th August 2008 @ 12:49:33 PM AEST
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such a beautiful poem, i love the message of how together the two of you would so much greater than if left alone...and i like the subtle rhyming that you used...
wiz |
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Re: Let Me
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by Ambivalence on
Wednesday, 27th August 2008 @ 02:14:10 PM AEST
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| mmMmm...a gentle and smooth piece of using nature and its elements to convey love. pretty creative i mite add. cant wait for more of ur poems. take care |
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Re: Let Me
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 27th August 2008 @ 11:29:26 PM AEST
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Beautiful work.
"And promise that you'll,
let me burn in your heart"
Damn. That is just about the most romantic line
I've read in a very long while! So impossibly poetic!!
Great post!
~ Breezy
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Re: Let Me
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 28th August 2008 @ 03:53:34 PM AEST
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Very well carried out. This is simply refreshing, love poetry untrammeled by either clichés or the insecure need to be overtly off-the-wall. I like the first stanza especially, a very graceful execution of rhyme and rhythm.
Nice!
- A |
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Re: Let Me
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 9th September 2008 @ 12:26:26 PM AEST
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truly beautiful a perfect poem,
hugs n' love nessa |
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