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[aid] => mick
[title] => Can You Love the Beast?
[time] => 2008-07-14 04:53:38
[hometext] => A bit different from my norm - written a while back and meant to be read with a certain rhythm. See if you hate it or not.
[bodytext] => Can you love the beast
can you love
can you love
can you love the beast?
Alone he creeps
Alone
Alone...
Alone he sleeps
Wanting not
Alone to be…
Alone to be.
Down the alley by
Alley by the brook
Dwindling down
Always down the broken street
Lays a heart
Like a kitten crying
Hugged in oily rags
Tossed and discarded.
By walks the city
Smacking, splashing
Footstep puddles
Bleeding in the eyes of the beast
Crying alone
Alone
Alone he sleeps
Crying can you love the beast
Can you love
Can you love the beast?
[comments] => 5
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[topic] => 75
[informant] => wheels
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[ratings] => 0
[editpoem] => 1
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[topicname] => anguished
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Can You Love the Beast?
Contributed by
wheels
on
Monday, 14th July 2008 @ 04:53:38 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Can you love the beast
can you love
can you love
can you love the beast?
Alone he creeps
Alone
Alone...
Alone he sleeps
Wanting not
Alone to be…
Alone to be.
Down the alley by
Alley by the brook
Dwindling down
Always down the broken street
Lays a heart
Like a kitten crying
Hugged in oily rags
Tossed and discarded.
By walks the city
Smacking, splashing
Footstep puddles
Bleeding in the eyes of the beast
Crying alone
Alone
Alone he sleeps
Crying can you love the beast
Can you love
Can you love the beast?
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wheels
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2008-07-14 04:53:38]
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Re: Can You Love the Beast?
(User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on
Monday, 14th July 2008 @ 05:19:40 AM AEST
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Different, yes...but in a good way...
I read this aloud ( I am no good at this) and it sounded good to me..so I could just imagine it being done by someone on a stage... Good piece..
Jenni |
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Re: Can You Love the Beast?
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by PhantomVampyress on
Monday, 14th July 2008 @ 06:00:13 AM AEST
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this is very different but it flows like a song I like this different sort of write.. it has a very nice flow to it.. thanks for sharing.
rock on,
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: Can You Love the Beast?
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by wizard on
Monday, 14th July 2008 @ 06:11:51 AM AEST
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well, i definitely don't hate it...lol
actually, i like it a lot... i agree with PhantomVampyress that it seems like a song... i could almost hear the music playing,
nice job,
wiz |
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Re: Can You Love the Beast?
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 14th July 2008 @ 08:44:27 AM AEST
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Very well-executed, I like it. It's easy enough to use repetition in a poem, but difficult to make it work right. You managed to make it sound like your own, which is good.
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Re: Can You Love the Beast?
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by NoSaint on
Tuesday, 15th July 2008 @ 09:23:17 AM AEST
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interesting write...I like it very much
NS |
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