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Ahhhh
Contributed by
rhei76
on
Wednesday, 16th April 2008 @ 05:42:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Ahhh, it's been months, I've been gone. Still right here, or maybe I'm back, but still where I am, reguardless of that, that's where I'm found.
You see from the tooth of the insect's loot. I raised my head, I'm kinda stoned, like gazing off into the stars... watch and try not to smell, the stinch, that stink, it dwells deep in that place of dreams where hollow tells and echo screams.
You see from the bath of noise, a tolerance was formed while the water swelled, there was something learned.
like that of recollect, falling to the center of gravity, where there was a stream of fire oh, yet many colors, now floating like liquid with no ground.
I don't mind the smell at this time,
all senses full,track, I was amazed, hell, amused, frighten so, beautiful, it could of taken my breath away. I tell you so, but that's just anxiety, feeling suprised and not knowing if you should feel happy, thlngs get weird, and it's....
Ahhh, I should of told you this won't make two dimes, a quarter or a fifty cent piece,
Live and radio active, yet so distracted. Maybe I'm a.d.d., maybe the doctor was right when my mommy said special.
Stars, they born a legend, the things that glow and remembered after times returned, hear them in the cries of the infamous currents of the noise, I hear you and I am looking to, one day soon pay my respect and urges, I tell you love, maybe I'm bipolar, i cant draw, i cant write, i cant play, ****, I forgot what next to say
Star I have something for you, Star it will some day make the energy to show my lighter in the night, babe please watch every...
....in my head and in my dream, tell me what I mean.
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2008-04-16 17:42:43] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Ahhhh
(User Rating: 1 ) by jantra on
Wednesday, 16th April 2008 @ 04:32:36 PM AEST (User
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ok at the risk of sounding too harsh here i have to tell you that that was pretty much unreadable. you say in the subject line that its just words and it doesnt need to make sense. but i beg to differ my friend. poetry is a form of communication and if you are just putting random words why should anyone care to try and understand what you are trying to say let alone take the time to read it if you are not really even trying to say anything? Anyone can just throw random words together, thats called magnet poetry. there may be an actual poem here but it needs to have A LOT of excess proverbial fat trimmed off of it. |
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