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The Illusion of Make Believe as Determined by Otis Redding
Contributed by
a7x36
on
Wednesday, 9th April 2008 @ 06:16:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
surreal
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Symphonic rambling in the dark
Shows me the dawn of a new day.
The discord of our private lives
Is compounded by an elaborate magician’s work
Towards ultimately making that rabbit appear.
For real this time.
Jesus called,
He wants his halo back.
And he wants to know how you got his phone number.
“That’s a tough one to explain,”
You stumble upon your own words.
Then fall into all that is fall.
Leaves and all.
Goodnight, you’ve been great.
I tip my had to thee and
Hop the next train to Clevetroit:
Crack rock city.
Copyright ©
a7x36
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2008-04-09 18:16:52]
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Re: The Illusion of Make Believe as Determined by Otis Redding
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by Bleedthelove on
Thursday, 10th April 2008 @ 12:35:20 AM AEST
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| This is so weird that it's enjoyable, and I mean weird in the good sense. It's brilliantly written in a strange way. I like it alot. High five to you. |
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Re: The Illusion of Make Believe as Determined by Otis Redding
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by ZiggyB on
Thursday, 10th April 2008 @ 02:24:15 PM AEST
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| I have to agree with Bleedthelove, this is strange, but kind of neat at the same time. I guess it's pretty good. |
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Re: The Illusion of Make Believe as Determined by Otis Redding
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Sunday, 13th April 2008 @ 08:40:30 AM AEST
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Fascinating and absorbing, loved the bit about getting Jesus's phone number.
It's a very off the wall piece but that is its charm
Well done
Steve |
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Re: The Illusion of Make Believe as Determined by Otis Redding
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Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 11:47:29 PM AEST
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Re: The Illusion of Make Believe as Determined by Otis Redding
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by Lee on
Monday, 2nd June 2008 @ 07:01:25 AM AEST
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thoroughly enjoyable.
good stuff |
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Re: The Illusion of Make Believe as Determined by Otis Redding
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by deusdeira on
Tuesday, 30th November 2010 @ 01:43:59 AM AEST
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| lol that made me laugh. |
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