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~Long Ago & Far Away~
Contributed by
Jenni_K
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Wednesday, 9th April 2008 @ 10:55:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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Seems like a million years have passed,
We were young, we were free.
We sat on a cliff on the island,
And carved our names on a tree.
I remember your touch,
I remember your kiss..
Being with you that way,
Always brought so much bliss..
We never loved each other,
This we both knew to be true ,
Yet we had so much fun together,
Just me and you.
We'd fish together all day long,
We'd swim in the ocean blue.
You saved me once when a dive went wrong,
I'll always be grateful to you.
So long ago and far away,
Seems like a million years have passed,
I know you'll be back on the island some day,
This brings back memories I thought would never last.
All those memories come rushing thru me...
Maybe we could relive it one more time
Even though we are both no longer free,
It would be fun to make one last island lime.*
* Lime is a local word for "hang out/party/get together"
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Jenni_K
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2008-04-09 10:55:32] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: ~Long Ago & Far Away~
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadwriter on
Wednesday, 9th April 2008 @ 11:01:11 AM AEST (User
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Very nice write Jenni. I hope you get your wish one day soon.
Deadwriter
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Re: ~Long Ago & Far Away~
(User Rating: 1 ) by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 9th April 2008 @ 03:29:40 PM AEST (User
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wow this is lovely.. sounds like a remembering of young love.. very well written could be a song.. awesome job
rock on,
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: ~Long Ago & Far Away~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th April 2008 @ 10:40:51 PM AEST (User
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This is very sweet and nostalgic, I hope the inspiration knows you think of him/her.
~Jess |
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Re: ~Long Ago & Far Away~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th April 2008 @ 05:25:44 AM AEST (User
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Memories can be so sweet!
I like the way you shared yours with us.
I hope you make many great more.... memories and poems! |
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Re: ~Long Ago & Far Away~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th April 2008 @ 09:34:46 AM AEST (User
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" We never loved each other, This we both knew to be true " this is a breathless line
dip'ed in such innosence so sweet to the taste upon the tong of honesty. and the poem itself, a colaberation between the
heart and the mind, a masterpeice if ever there was . . .
Thank you also Jenni, for your read and
your comment, always nice to hear from
you . . .
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Re: ~Long Ago & Far Away~
(User Rating: 1 ) by ZiggyB on
Thursday, 10th April 2008 @ 02:03:54 PM AEST (User
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Very nice write. I believe that this will take all readers back to their early days of young love. Just remembering the fun youthful times with whomever was the apple of your eye at that precious moment. Nicely done... |
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Re: ~Long Ago & Far Away~
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 11:08:00 AM AEST (User
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very interesting, thoughtful and descriptive. i love the addition of a local word at the end, a great touch. your imagination is boundless. |
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