Your Poetry Dot Com

Welcome to Your Poetry Dot Com - Read, Rate, Comment on, or Submit Poetry. Browse Poetry Forums, or just enjoy other parts of our poetic community.
One of the largest databases of poetry on the net, now over 198,500+ poems!

Poems On Site: 198,500+ Comments On Poems: 427,000+ Forum Posts: 105,000+

Custom Search


Welcome !	Home · FAQ · Topics · Web Links · Your Account · Submit Poetry · Top 30 · OldSite Link	29-May 17:05:34 AEST

Menu

· Our eBay Store

· Error Submit

Poetry

· Submit Poetry

· Least Read Poems

· Members Listing

· Old Site Post 2001

· Old Site Pre 2001

· Poetry Archive

· Public Domain Poetry

Stories

· Stories (NEW ! )

· Submit Story

· Story Topics

· Stories Archive

· Story Search

Community

· Our Poetry Forums

· Our Arcade
100's of Games !

Site Help

· FAQ

· Feedback

Members Areas

· Your Account

· Members Journals

· Premium Sign-Up

Premium Section

· Special Section

· Premium Poems

· Premium Submit

· Premium Search

· Premium Archive

· Premium Topics

Fun & Games

· Jokes

· Bubble Puzzle

· Cross Word Easy

· Word Hunt

Reference

· Dictionary (Rhyming)

· Site Updates

· Special Content

Search

Top

Help This Site

· Donations

Others

· Moderators

Our Other Sites

· Embroidery Design Store
· Your Jokes
· Special Urls
· JM Embroideries
· Public Domain Poetry and Stories
· Diamond Dotz
· Cooking Info and Recipes
· Quoof - Australian Story

Social

Array ( [sid] => 141444 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => i killed myself [time] => 2008-04-07 23:46:02 [hometext] => i wrote it in first period....its ok i think...comment?any way you think i can improve it let me know. [bodytext] => I'm sitting in this room,
It's dark and Im alone,
I dont know how I got here,
but I see a lot of blood,
There's a knife beside me,
And a body to my left,
I'm weak and shaking but I turn her over,
I'm shocked to see,
This poor girl is me,
She's dressed in black,
And there are cuts on her arm,
Why has she caused herself so much bodily harm?
There's a letter in her hand,
It simply says 'good-bye',
I realized that it was a letter of suicide,
She was sad and lonely,
She couldnt stand to live,
So she decided to slit her wrist,
But why is this knife in my hand?
Did I force her to take this step?
The step that caused her to end her life,
All because I wanted to live,
Why couldn't I just dwell within?
Within the sad and depressed part of me?
Why did I want to be set free?
Now I'm forced to live in this world alone,
And call this hell hole a home,
I don't think I can handle it on my own,
But I killed the only friend I had,
I'll live in each day,
Regretting what I've done,
Maybe I was meant to live,
And make my life rite,
But only time can tell,
And I dont have much of that,
Living in this hell. [comments] => 5 [counter] => 248 [topic] => 61 [informant] => BRIDGI [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 0 [associated] => [topicname] => selfstruggles )

i killed myself

Contributed by BRIDGI on Monday, 7th April 2008 @ 11:46:02 PM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles

I'm sitting in this room,
It's dark and Im alone,
I dont know how I got here,
but I see a lot of blood,
There's a knife beside me,
And a body to my left,
I'm weak and shaking but I turn her over,
I'm shocked to see,
This poor girl is me,
She's dressed in black,
And there are cuts on her arm,
Why has she caused herself so much bodily harm?
There's a letter in her hand,
It simply says 'good-bye',
I realized that it was a letter of suicide,
She was sad and lonely,
She couldnt stand to live,
So she decided to slit her wrist,
But why is this knife in my hand?
Did I force her to take this step?
The step that caused her to end her life,
All because I wanted to live,
Why couldn't I just dwell within?
Within the sad and depressed part of me?
Why did I want to be set free?
Now I'm forced to live in this world alone,
And call this hell hole a home,
I don't think I can handle it on my own,
But I killed the only friend I had,
I'll live in each day,
Regretting what I've done,
Maybe I was meant to live,
And make my life rite,
But only time can tell,
And I dont have much of that,
Living in this hell.

Copyright © BRIDGI ... [ 2008-04-07 23:46:02]
(Date/Time posted on site)

Advertisments:

Previous Posted Poem | | Next Posted Poem

Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more

All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title etc.

Re: i killed myself (User Rating: 1 )
by deadwriter on Tuesday, 8th April 2008 @ 02:56:05 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

I like your writing. A few spelling errors, but a great write just the same. I think dark poetry sometimes releases just enough energy to get things on the right path again.

Deadwriter

Re: i killed myself (User Rating: 1 )
by poetrygirl1991 on Tuesday, 8th April 2008 @ 05:38:51 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

I agree with the previous person. This is an excellent write. It expresses everything you're feeling. I enjoyed reading it, keep up on the good work =)

Re: i killed myself (User Rating: 1 )
by vampyrekiss on Tuesday, 8th April 2008 @ 08:40:18 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

great write i liked the perspative of it keep it up and hopefully this will pass and if its just a write great job

Vampyre

Re: i killed myself (User Rating: 1 )
by xxILoveTheSilencexx on Sunday, 13th April 2008 @ 12:05:14 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

amazing....i tried to write smething sorta like this....but it wasnt as good as yours....=)

Re: i killed myself (User Rating: 1 )
by alibof10 on Sunday, 11th May 2008 @ 10:54:41 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

amazingly written and expresses a huge amount of emotions and feelings ... an awesome poem .. no1 could've written the same idea better ... i love it :)

While every care is taken to ensure the general sites content is family safe, our moderators cannot be in all places; all the time. Please report poetry and or comments that are in breach of our site rules HERE (Please include poem title or url). Parents also please ensure that you supervise your children well when they are on the internet; regardless of what a site says about being, or being considered, child-safe.

Poetry is much like a great photo, a single "moment in time" capturing many feelings and emotions. Yet, they are very alive; creating stirrings within the readers who form visual "pictures" of the expressed emotions within the Poem. ©

Opinions expressed in the poetry, comments, forums etc. on this site are not necessarily those of this site, its owners and/or operators; but of the individuals who post items to this site.
Frequently Asked Questions | | | Privacy Policy | | | Contact Webmaster

All submitted items are Copyright © to their submitter. All the rest Copyright © 2002-2050 by Your Poetry Dot Com

All logos and trademarks in this site are property of their respective owners.

Script Generation Time: 0.052 Seconds. - View our Site Map | .© your-poetry.com