Your Poetry Dot Com

Welcome to Your Poetry Dot Com - Read, Rate, Comment on, or Submit Poetry. Browse Poetry Forums, or just enjoy other parts of our poetic community.
One of the largest databases of poetry on the net, now over 198,500+ poems!

Poems On Site: 198,500+ Comments On Poems: 427,000+ Forum Posts: 105,000+

Custom Search


Welcome !	Home · FAQ · Topics · Web Links · Your Account · Submit Poetry · Top 30 · OldSite Link	29-May 11:54:44 AEST

Menu

· Our eBay Store

· Error Submit

Poetry

· Submit Poetry

· Least Read Poems

· Members Listing

· Old Site Post 2001

· Old Site Pre 2001

· Poetry Archive

· Public Domain Poetry

Stories

· Stories (NEW ! )

· Submit Story

· Story Topics

· Stories Archive

· Story Search

Community

· Our Poetry Forums

· Our Arcade
100's of Games !

Site Help

· FAQ

· Feedback

Members Areas

· Your Account

· Members Journals

· Premium Sign-Up

Premium Section

· Special Section

· Premium Poems

· Premium Submit

· Premium Search

· Premium Archive

· Premium Topics

Fun & Games

· Jokes

· Bubble Puzzle

· Cross Word Easy

· Word Hunt

Reference

· Dictionary (Rhyming)

· Site Updates

· Special Content

Search

Top

Help This Site

· Donations

Others

· Moderators

Our Other Sites

· Embroidery Design Store
· Your Jokes
· Special Urls
· JM Embroideries
· Public Domain Poetry and Stories
· Diamond Dotz
· Cooking Info and Recipes
· Quoof - Australian Story

Social

Array ( [sid] => 140734 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => All at Sea [time] => 2008-03-02 22:59:40 [hometext] => [bodytext] => The clouds they drift in aimless sky
Upon this life of mine
The sun is shaded by hidden doubt
No matter how I try

Far horizons , so out of sight
No future ahead for me
I live this life of solitude
I am so lostand all at sea

The waves they spill over my head
As the current takes me under
Is this my just desserts I see
My punishment I wonder?

I am drowning in a sea of doubt
The sky is dark and eerie
My mind mixed up, my soul is torn
And I am tense and weary

I am submerged , held by despair
I want so much to be free
But I cannot break these hidden chains
For I am lost and all at sea

[comments] => 8 [counter] => 319 [topic] => 61 [informant] => jerseysue [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 13 [ratings] => 3 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => selfstruggles )

All at Sea

Contributed by jerseysue on Sunday, 2nd March 2008 @ 10:59:40 PM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles

The clouds they drift in aimless sky
Upon this life of mine
The sun is shaded by hidden doubt
No matter how I try

Far horizons , so out of sight
No future ahead for me
I live this life of solitude
I am so lostand all at sea

The waves they spill over my head
As the current takes me under
Is this my just desserts I see
My punishment I wonder?

I am drowning in a sea of doubt
The sky is dark and eerie
My mind mixed up, my soul is torn
And I am tense and weary

I am submerged , held by despair
I want so much to be free
But I cannot break these hidden chains
For I am lost and all at sea

Copyright © jerseysue ... [ 2008-03-02 22:59:40]
(Date/Time posted on site)

Advertisments:

Previous Posted Poem | | Next Posted Poem

Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more

All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title etc.

Re: All at Sea (User Rating: 1 )
by fielding88 on Monday, 3rd March 2008 @ 12:03:30 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

Very nice. The structure kind of leads you through the poem, and I very much enjoyed the story you told, with a very touching ending that works well with the subject matter. The rhythm and form made for an easy read. Thank you for sharing this, I'm glad I read it.

Re: All at Sea (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 3rd March 2008 @ 04:24:44 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

Sue, this is just heart wrenching! I love the metaphor you used,
though. It really cuts to the core. Your word choices have the power
to afflict your readers with sadness and pain and the ending was so
powerful. Very emotive and distressing.

Excellent post, poet! I hope things are not as bad as they seem
in this piece, but even so, I know you have a strength within you
to rise above. Peace to you, friend.

*hugs to you *

~Breezy

Re: All at Sea (User Rating: 1 )
by tifrob on Monday, 3rd March 2008 @ 06:09:09 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

It is a heart wrenching piece. Your readers feel your words and that's the essence of a poet. Good luck.

~Me~

Re: All at Sea (User Rating: 1 )
by Wildecat on Monday, 3rd March 2008 @ 09:57:18 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

Sue, this is a beautiful poem, thanks for telling me about this site. Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem. Take Care.

Love and Hugs,
Wildecat,

Re: All at Sea (User Rating: 1 )
by PhantomVampyress on Tuesday, 4th March 2008 @ 05:12:27 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

wow this is amazing.. I love the wording.. this just is so expressive and flows together so perfectly.. I absolutely love the last stanza.. its so painful and yet so powerful. beautiful work here !!

rock on,

vampyress Jenni

Re: All at Sea (User Rating: 1 )
by LoveStruck_Hippie on Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 05:42:37 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

This is a wonderfully powerful piece. The intensity in the metaphor profound.

Thank you for sharing

Peace

~Shannon

Re: All at Sea (User Rating: 1 )
by wheels on Monday, 4th August 2008 @ 06:14:40 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

I must say - wow - beautifully written.

--Kevin
the lonely vagabond

Re: All at Sea (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Sunday, 18th May 2014 @ 12:52:40 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

heartfelt and truly beautiful with vivid imagery,

hugs n' love nessa

While every care is taken to ensure the general sites content is family safe, our moderators cannot be in all places; all the time. Please report poetry and or comments that are in breach of our site rules HERE (Please include poem title or url). Parents also please ensure that you supervise your children well when they are on the internet; regardless of what a site says about being, or being considered, child-safe.

Poetry is much like a great photo, a single "moment in time" capturing many feelings and emotions. Yet, they are very alive; creating stirrings within the readers who form visual "pictures" of the expressed emotions within the Poem. ©

Opinions expressed in the poetry, comments, forums etc. on this site are not necessarily those of this site, its owners and/or operators; but of the individuals who post items to this site.
Frequently Asked Questions | | | Privacy Policy | | | Contact Webmaster

All submitted items are Copyright © to their submitter. All the rest Copyright © 2002-2050 by Your Poetry Dot Com

All logos and trademarks in this site are property of their respective owners.

Script Generation Time: 0.052 Seconds. - View our Site Map | .© your-poetry.com