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Array ( [sid] => 14065 [catid] => 1 [aid] => Mick [title] => would you cry if i died tomorrow? [time] => 2003-03-11 03:40:00 [hometext] => [bodytext] => would you cry if i died tomorrow?
would your life be filled with sorrow?

if you never saw me again
would you cease writing with your pen?

if i could no longer bear this life
would you think of me with strife?

if i just couldn't take another day
would you hate me and just run away?

if my pain was too much to swallow
would you forget my lessons to follow?

if my dreams came crashing down
would you pull away from me and frown?

if i left you with all of my mess
would you end up like me: depressed?

well, let me tell you
this you may do
but you won't get a chance
i didn't die before you

i'm the one left with this sorrow
and you are not here
no shoulder to borrow...

february 16, 2003
1:00 AM [comments] => 9 [counter] => 302 [topic] => 36 [informant] => LadyDama [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => Suicide )

would you cry if i died tomorrow?

Contributed by LadyDama on Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 03:40:00 AM in AEST
Topic: Suicide

would you cry if i died tomorrow?
would your life be filled with sorrow?

if you never saw me again
would you cease writing with your pen?

if i could no longer bear this life
would you think of me with strife?

if i just couldn't take another day
would you hate me and just run away?

if my pain was too much to swallow
would you forget my lessons to follow?

if my dreams came crashing down
would you pull away from me and frown?

if i left you with all of my mess
would you end up like me: depressed?

well, let me tell you
this you may do
but you won't get a chance
i didn't die before you

i'm the one left with this sorrow
and you are not here
no shoulder to borrow...

february 16, 2003
1:00 AM

Copyright © LadyDama ... [ 2003-03-11 03:40:00]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: would you cry if i died tomorrow? (User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 04:23:48 AM AEST
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Wow! so many sad thoughts,nobody can tell what happens tomorrow, but sure all will have to leave their earthly bodies oneday or other. I think these feelings are quite temporary. venkat

Re: would you cry if i died tomorrow? (User Rating: 1 )
by riverofwords on Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 05:59:34 AM AEST
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what a very moving write ..i loved it ..for its intensity and expression of emotion.
i especially loved the end '..YOU ARE NOT HERE NO SHOULDER TO BORROW
beautiful

peace be your journey
terry

Re: would you cry if i died tomorrow? (User Rating: 1 )
by LOWMAN613 on Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 08:33:53 AM AEST
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So very sad but well done!
No one should take the time of tomorrow for granted! Great peice! Christina

Re: would you cry if i died tomorrow? (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 12:02:38 PM AEST
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*here's my shoulder* love and huggs and smiles, always nessa

Re: would you cry if i died tomorrow? (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 04:22:09 PM AEST
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This is written with such emotion. Great write and very true to this life.

Re: would you cry if i died tomorrow? (User Rating: 1 )
by roisin on Wednesday, 12th March 2003 @ 01:21:53 AM AEST
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heard the sadness and sorrow throughout...another good write
rosie

Re: would you cry if i died tomorrow? (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_Kalicharan on Sunday, 16th March 2003 @ 04:37:24 AM AEST
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Sad write..but lovely.... I have been having some morbid thoughts of late...so I can identify with this...
Jenni

Re: would you cry if i died tomorrow? (User Rating: 1 )
by karoody on Monday, 31st March 2003 @ 03:23:04 AM AEST
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wow, this was beautifully written with so much emotion. you have my shoulder too, any time. hope you know that.
kara

Re: would you cry if i died tomorrow? (User Rating: 1 )
by TheSpiritx on Saturday, 26th April 2003 @ 06:56:24 PM AEST
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Just a short observation before my comment:
People tend to flock towards the poetry about death. I think this is due to the mystery that surrounds the events afterwards, and others want to see if there is light shed on the matter.

That having been said, this is a good poem. I enjoyed how the questioning of such a topic as this turned out to be in vain, not to say that I take pleasure in what would seem to be futile actions superficially, but it was a good, intelligent turn in the poem's focus. Good job.

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