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Not Touching
Contributed by
Dom
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Friday, 25th January 2008 @ 05:43:31 AM in AEST
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We lay without touching
In distant beds, back to back,
My face is set once more
For comfort from the lonely arms
Of sleep. Together this is a vigil
Neither knows the other keeps.
The small sad sighs drift down
As feathers pendulum from sky to ground,
Then deeper underneath the earth
Through ribboned strata birthing
Fleeting somewheres only we can know.
Tomorrow we’ll go on not touching,
Painfully aware of the inch between our fingers
Where some other vastness has replaced the wood.
It seems we each are stood motionless
At edges of a fallow land.
But glance down again between our hands,
Can you see the roses pushing through,
Shoots unfurling, making ground?
Copyright ©
Dom
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2008-01-25 05:43:31]
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Re: Not Touching
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th January 2008 @ 10:09:55 PM AEST
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A poem to savour and digest in a personal way,and how I relate in the way that I read it.
I've spent half a lifetime in this poem.Enforced separation but always in the hope of those last three lines.
Congratulations on a tremendous piece,Dom.
Water those rose shoots well.
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Re: Not Touching
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by Spike on
Saturday, 26th January 2008 @ 03:40:30 PM AEST
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tragically, sweet, Dom. As I read this my thoughts lay not with separated lovers, but with those potential counterparts who have never met, through time, distance or circumstance, but feel a craving for the other nonetheless. Beautifully written.
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Re: Not Touching
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by anonymous1212 on
Sunday, 27th January 2008 @ 03:51:28 PM AEST
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| this poem is soo sweet. i think you did an amazing job and i definetly couldnt have said it any better. haha =) |
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Re: Not Touching
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 24th February 2008 @ 08:11:32 PM AEST
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Another gripping work of such art! Tragic, but still a glimmer of hope. This is a sad situation, it's a harsh moment to be in. Something draws you in, but as soon as that comes something pulls you back. In rapid repitition to the point where there is only a pause. A tragic and hard to express heart break which you found a way to relay in a deeply poetic work of art!
I hope you find either that hole in this wall, or another happiness soon. I must now catch up on your work which I have missed.
BRAVO!
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Re: Not Touching
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th March 2008 @ 05:35:52 AM AEST
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Beautiful love poem nice to see this side of your artistry, as always top notch . . .
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Re: Not Touching
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd June 2008 @ 10:02:58 PM AEST
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| I especially like that last line...there is such hope there. Very beautifully written. |
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Re: Not Touching
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by Oceandreamer on
Tuesday, 8th July 2008 @ 01:12:51 AM AEST
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Hmmm... I like love poems! : )
Lovely write.
Thanks for sharing...
~~Oceandreamer~~
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