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[aid] => Mick
[title] => Because your Beautiful
[time] => 2003-03-08 02:20:00
[hometext] => * This was a hard poem to write, but I think it paid off I quite enjoy it. The 1st and 2nd to last stanzas are about myself and the stuff in italics is someone else talking. The poem is written to my dear friend wyrd_faerie. *
[bodytext] => I get up shroud myself in my black cloak
Eyes leaden and tired like I just awoke
Go off to school for another hard day.
Paste a smile on my broken face
Memorize the words I am to say
You awake to lands touched by fog and mist
While I sleep in lands that are snow kissed
Your hand softly touches the window pane
Your heart aches, a lonely tear starts to fall
As the screaming slowly drives you insane
Your beautiful face broken by the tears
Sparked by the ugly words that fuel the fires of your fears
You cover yourself in a suit of black
'Secure, uncaring, unfeeling' Oh god if only the knew!
You wear it to deflect their flak
Your hurting and broken inside
For so long you've silently cried
The complexity of life takes its toll
Broken, as the wind howls in rage
I wish I could hold you, heal your broken soul
Your once beautiful nature, turns to ugly, dark walls
You've tried to scale them only to fall like broken rag dolls,
But your spirit is fierce it refuses to be dismayed
Lift up your head you dont have to feel this way
Even though you've been waylaid and your senses frayed
I? I try to be strong, but inside I'm weak
I dont know what I search for and seek
You? you never cease to put a smile on my face
The loneliness, depression you always erase
Because of this your worth my time and more
Soon baby the music will change
You will be able to bathe in the sun
Smile and laugh, because your beautiful
And we'll smile and cry all three of us
You, myself, and Emily
[comments] => 19
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[informant] => bobotheclown
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[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
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Because your Beautiful
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Saturday, 8th March 2003 @ 02:20:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I get up shroud myself in my black cloak
Eyes leaden and tired like I just awoke
Go off to school for another hard day.
Paste a smile on my broken face
Memorize the words I am to say
You awake to lands touched by fog and mist
While I sleep in lands that are snow kissed
Your hand softly touches the window pane
Your heart aches, a lonely tear starts to fall
As the screaming slowly drives you insane
Your beautiful face broken by the tears
Sparked by the ugly words that fuel the fires of your fears
You cover yourself in a suit of black
'Secure, uncaring, unfeeling' Oh god if only the knew!
You wear it to deflect their flak
Your hurting and broken inside
For so long you've silently cried
The complexity of life takes its toll
Broken, as the wind howls in rage
I wish I could hold you, heal your broken soul
Your once beautiful nature, turns to ugly, dark walls
You've tried to scale them only to fall like broken rag dolls,
But your spirit is fierce it refuses to be dismayed
Lift up your head you dont have to feel this way
Even though you've been waylaid and your senses frayed
I? I try to be strong, but inside I'm weak
I dont know what I search for and seek
You? you never cease to put a smile on my face
The loneliness, depression you always erase
Because of this your worth my time and more
Soon baby the music will change
You will be able to bathe in the sun
Smile and laugh, because your beautiful
And we'll smile and cry all three of us
You, myself, and Emily
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 8th March 2003 @ 02:43:42 AM AEST
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| ohh, joel, this is so beautiful!!! i love when you write like this, hugs n' love always nessa |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by roisin on
Saturday, 8th March 2003 @ 03:36:29 AM AEST
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"and we'll smile and cry all three of us
you, myself, and emily"...wonderful poem, especially liked this line..I can picture the three of you, joel, lucie and emily...smiling, laughing...tis abeautiful picture I see...a good read
ta rosie
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by LovingWhispers on
Saturday, 8th March 2003 @ 05:45:25 AM AEST
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*sigh*....Is just beautiful...Simply Beautiful!!! .Tried to find a part of the poem I liked best and all I could come up with was
I get up shroud myself in my black cloak
Eyes leaden and tired like I just awoke
Go off to school for another hard day.
Paste a smile on my broken face
Memorize the words I am to say
You awake to lands touched by fog and mist
While I sleep in lands that are snow kissed
Your hand softly touches the window pane
Your heart aches, a lonely tear starts to fall
As the screaming slowly drives you insane
Your beautiful face broken by the tears
Sparked by the ugly words that fuel the fires of your fears
You cover yourself in a suit of black
'Secure, uncaring, unfeeling' Oh god if only the knew!
You wear it to deflect their flak
Your hurting and broken inside
For so long you've silently cried
The complexity of life takes its toll
Broken, as the wind howls in rage
I wish I could hold you, heal your broken soul
Your once beautiful nature, turns to ugly, dark walls
You've tried to scale them only to fall like broken rag dolls,
But your spirit is fierce it refuses to be dismayed
Lift up your head you dont have to feel this way
Even though you've been waylaid and your senses frayed
I? I try to be strong, but inside I'm weak
I dont know what I search for and seek
You? you never cease to put a smile on my face
The loneliness, depression you always erase
Because of this your worth my time and more
Soon baby the music will change
You will be able to bathe in the sun
Smile and laugh, because your beautiful
And we'll smile and cry all three of us
You, myself, and Emily |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by LadyDama on
Saturday, 8th March 2003 @ 05:59:31 AM AEST
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| i am a reader of both of you... your poems spark my soul and allow me to dream of my own inner self... what a beautiful poem... what a tribute... blessings... |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Saturday, 8th March 2003 @ 11:37:34 AM AEST
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| Joel, this is absolutely gorgeous....thank you for sharing! :) |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by wyrd_faerie on
Saturday, 8th March 2003 @ 04:45:02 PM AEST
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| oh joel...i really, truly have no words...i'm crying now...you are one of the most beautiful people i have ever met, the other being emily...you mean so much to me...words can't describe...i love you...thankyou... |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by DreamWeaver on
Sunday, 9th March 2003 @ 06:42:44 AM AEST
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| Wow ... this is an incredible poem ... I absolutely loved it ... I don't know the three of you or what your pain is but I wish every happiness to come your way. Wonderful write. ... Jan |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 9th March 2003 @ 04:14:58 PM AEST
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Joel, this is soooo beautiful!!!! I loved it... I'm sure Lucie was thrilled... I wish you both the very best...
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by wolfflow on
Sunday, 9th March 2003 @ 05:04:37 PM AEST
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| this is such a good poem, i read you both and think you both excellent poets, this is a little different from your usual stuff but no better or worse for that, but no, it is somewhat better, the human contact in it takes it on to a higher plain, excellent write again |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by karoody on
Saturday, 15th March 2003 @ 12:14:03 AM AEST
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| this is a lovely write, joel. you have such a kind heart and so does lucie. i agree with the above, both of you are great writers. |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by mckayla on
Sunday, 16th March 2003 @ 07:50:58 PM AEST
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excellent write!!
mckayla |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by Ilhar on
Sunday, 16th March 2003 @ 09:53:36 PM AEST
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Joel this is the one i like best of your writes it is magnificent
Shari |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by AngryPrincess on
Sunday, 16th March 2003 @ 10:23:42 PM AEST
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beautiful joel... *sigh*
Lindsey |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by Chef-Boy-R-C on
Tuesday, 18th March 2003 @ 05:05:55 PM AEST
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| EXCELLENT poem. I liked the choce of words in this poem nad how you truly expressed yourself. |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by Chef-Boy-R-C on
Tuesday, 18th March 2003 @ 05:06:09 PM AEST
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| EXCELLENT poem. I liked the choice of words in this poem nad how you truly expressed yourself. |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by M on
Wednesday, 19th March 2003 @ 03:18:59 AM AEST
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| Hey Joel! like i said in the PM, this is such a beautiful poem. i very nearly cried when Lucie should it to me. Ahhh, i love it. love and hope, EmilyxXx |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by yellow_sundragon on
Thursday, 20th March 2003 @ 05:58:02 PM AEST
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You have to give me a moment. After the line "I wish I could hold you, heal your broken soul" my chest constricted and I started crying...
This is a very beautifully dark poem. The emotions... the imagery... this is sooo beautiful. Profoundly beautiful... Thank you for sharing this...
YS (Jaime) |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by Wilder on
Tuesday, 25th March 2003 @ 04:00:41 PM AEST
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| Wow. I think I must have sat here for a good few minutes after I read your poem. It's extremely well written, you should try to get it published in a book (if you haven't already). I'll be reading alot more of your stuff! |
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Re: Because your Beautiful
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by wyrd_faerie on
Friday, 1st August 2003 @ 05:31:02 PM AEST
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| what happened to us? |
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