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Array ( [sid] => 138948 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => he's got [time] => 2007-12-03 06:21:22 [hometext] => [bodytext] => he’s got

dark
tenement windows
on ninth street,

peeled plaster
on the walls,

a bedroom,

a bath,

a refrigerator
with two
mouldy pears
sitting in a bowl on top…

a beat-up
Philco TV
that picks up channel 29
when the weather’s right.

and the glory
of his life
is
this cute
little Puerto Rican girl
he calls Jack Daniels

because
she goes down
real
real smooth.

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he's got

Contributed by JohnYamrus on Monday, 3rd December 2007 @ 06:21:22 AM in AEST
Topic: oops

he’s got

dark
tenement windows
on ninth street,

peeled plaster
on the walls,

a bedroom,

a bath,

a refrigerator
with two
mouldy pears
sitting in a bowl on top…

a beat-up
Philco TV
that picks up channel 29
when the weather’s right.

and the glory
of his life
is
this cute
little Puerto Rican girl
he calls Jack Daniels

because
she goes down
real
real smooth.

Copyright Â© JohnYamrus ... [ 2007-12-03 06:21:22]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: he's got (User Rating: 1 )
by conorshawn on Monday, 3rd December 2007 @ 10:15:46 AM AEST
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i use to know this puerto rican girl had to let her go, but i like this writing

Re: he's got (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Monday, 3rd December 2007 @ 01:38:22 PM AEST
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I use to think 'bout Mr. Daniels in my youth but I always ended in turning up the bottle after the fisrt shot with coke or Mountain ? Any way that made me sick as hell the next day so I gave up that 'cause hang overs are hell.
Very good writting here.
Huggs, big smiles, happy holidays,
emy

Re: he's got (User Rating: 1 )
by deadheadpoet on Monday, 3rd December 2007 @ 02:10:47 PM AEST
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You've painted a vividly sad and lonely picture. Good solid write.
Peace and Happy Holidays,
Laura

Re: he's got (User Rating: 1 )
by ki on Tuesday, 4th December 2007 @ 01:33:36 AM AEST
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very unique

Re: he's got (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Tuesday, 4th December 2007 @ 01:57:41 AM AEST
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Well here I am back where I started.
You are an incredible writer to capture my reading this long.
Not too many writers can mezmerize as yours does.
There have been some but few and far between.
big smiles,
emy

Re: he's got (User Rating: 1 )
by Wachumiri on Tuesday, 4th December 2007 @ 01:46:35 PM AEST
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Interesting how a poem about having paints such a desolate picture.
Well done.
Take care,
David

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