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In Deep
Contributed by
asleep-before-dawn
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Saturday, 30th June 2007 @ 08:46:52 AM in AEST
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In deep
thoughts, confusion, illusions.
Reaching no true conclusion.
Perverse mind's think alike
no reason to be unkind
though we are, you are.
In deep
trouble, boiling doubled.
Etched glass fragments in heart
roll the dice, draw unmarked cards
lose again winners win
all wrapped up in yourself.
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2007-06-30 08:46:52] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: In Deep
(User Rating: 1 ) by Poess on
Saturday, 30th June 2007 @ 09:11:12 AM AEST (User
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I like the flow of this. I was kinda lost the first time I read it but I got what you were trying to get across after another read.
I like the etched glass reference.
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Re: In Deep
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 2nd July 2007 @ 01:26:41 AM AEST (User
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Hmmm This was short, but so deep. I did read it a couple times because I just loved the flow and the feel of it. Both of your stanzas flood my senses. Wonderful read.
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Re: In Deep
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th September 2007 @ 06:43:28 AM AEST (User
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this is a very lovely poem. It had a nice flow to it! |
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