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[title] => Forever Lost
[time] => 2007-06-05 08:01:31
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In the coolness of the night
I do think of you
and
Who you are
You see I thought
I knew you so well
Who you were
and what you were
I found out
I don't know you at all
Who are you?
Your smile has never changed
The tender touch
you know all too well
and never forgot it
not once during this long cold winter
you created
I had a false sense of comfort
laying on a bed full of lies
Eyes of blue beckon to me
Within them burns a hell
You must dig down deep
with in yourself, my love
I cannot bear this torturous journey
much longer and alone I do feel
You are there
I smell you
But you are so far away from me, now
So many miles away
Can we find one another again
Paths get so jumbled along the way
Things get twisted and tangled
Some of us are simply....forever lost
6-02-07
Laura Horner
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Forever Lost
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
on
Tuesday, 5th June 2007 @ 08:01:31 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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In the coolness of the night
I do think of you
and
Who you are
You see I thought
I knew you so well
Who you were
and what you were
I found out
I don't know you at all
Who are you?
Your smile has never changed
The tender touch
you know all too well
and never forgot it
not once during this long cold winter
you created
I had a false sense of comfort
laying on a bed full of lies
Eyes of blue beckon to me
Within them burns a hell
You must dig down deep
with in yourself, my love
I cannot bear this torturous journey
much longer and alone I do feel
You are there
I smell you
But you are so far away from me, now
So many miles away
Can we find one another again
Paths get so jumbled along the way
Things get twisted and tangled
Some of us are simply....forever lost
6-02-07
Laura Horner
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2007-06-05 08:01:31]
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Re: Forever Lost
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by Crow on
Tuesday, 5th June 2007 @ 10:34:15 AM AEST
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| Laura this is such a tender write, there is such a needing in the words. awesome write my friend..Vincent |
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Re: Forever Lost
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 5th June 2007 @ 10:36:16 AM AEST
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I find this write alittle on the confusing side .
but then i reread it a few more times then i got it.lol i am kinda slow today.
great job on this
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Re: Forever Lost
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 5th June 2007 @ 11:33:06 AM AEST
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Laura,
A sad refrain on a love lost. It reminds me of a poem I wrote months ago, called "Mourning Tne Dream." The loss was not real because the person was never real; and so she was grieving what could have been, not what was ....
So a very sad but insightful poem of trying to love someone who was never available.
Well done my friend,
Will
PS I want to get back to you on your poem about Poison.... |
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Re: Forever Lost
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 6th June 2007 @ 01:37:24 AM AEST
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oh my dear sis! Just when I think you've deeply wounded my heart
with a write, you go and outdo the pain of that with even more heart-gripping
words.
The picture you placed at the beginning and the words that follow,
all got me to thinking ... and reminded me of a line from a John
Mayer song ...
"she's like a maze, where all of the walls all continually change . . ."
most people are like that, methinks. No matter how much we
think we know someone, (for however long), they can still surprise
us. Sometimes the surprise is delightful, and sometimes not. But I
believe it proves that through it all, lifes battles, the ups and downs,
we continue to learn and grow and become better people. Especially
with the help of beautiful souls like yours.
I know your life is trying ... I know there is a battle still raging, but
I also know that you are one of the smartest, strongest and most loving
souls I've met. Continue to be brave, sis. You are not alone.
Exceptional piece, hun. Truly remarkable.
~MG
(sending hugs and anything else I can that might help my sis) |
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Re: Forever Lost
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Wednesday, 6th June 2007 @ 03:50:50 AM AEST
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Simply well written. You poured out your thoughts and questions and it held all of this pain and sadness and wonder in each word. You did a great job expressing how you felt. I give you many hugs and hopes that you can find the path that will led you both back into what you once had. This was good. Well done.
Take care
Tons & millions of hugs..
Christina |
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Re: Forever Lost
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by needledancing on
Wednesday, 6th June 2007 @ 05:10:48 AM AEST
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| The emptiness of love lost has been the creator of great writing. The proof lies before us. Well done. |
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Re: Forever Lost
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 6th June 2007 @ 08:04:40 AM AEST
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a powerful emotional write full of needing and wanting. you can feel those emotions strongly .. so well expressed.. wonderfully penned out
Vampyress Jenni |
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Re: Forever Lost
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 6th June 2007 @ 12:44:11 PM AEST
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it is always a shock to the senses to realize one we thought we knew so well is someone else all together, yuesh,
love n' hugs nessa |
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Re: Forever Lost
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by emystar on
Thursday, 7th June 2007 @ 06:11:05 PM AEST
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Very sad, my friend but great writing.
I'll keep you in my prayers.
I certainly know the feelings from my past.
big ole huggs, strength, luv, peace, joy,
emy |
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