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Array ( [sid] => 133572 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Makeover [time] => 2007-04-16 20:01:14 [hometext] => Some people can't move on, and obsess in trying to re-create something now out of reach. [bodytext] =>

I glimpse you in a movement,
a gesture firm and clear
the scent of your perfume
that signals you are near
your laughter, like the resonance
of a crystal mountain stream,
a shadow of impermanence
that lingers like a dream

I draw you in their casing,
and make you only mine
and keep their spirits guessing
what I’ll offer in good time
then I dress them in your features,
and make them change their ways,
but they’ll never be as you were
in those far flung, better days. [comments] => 5 [counter] => 200 [topic] => 13 [informant] => Spike [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 25 [ratings] => 5 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )

Makeover

Contributed by Spike on Monday, 16th April 2007 @ 08:01:14 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

I glimpse you in a movement,
a gesture firm and clear
the scent of your perfume
that signals you are near
your laughter, like the resonance
of a crystal mountain stream,
a shadow of impermanence
that lingers like a dream

I draw you in their casing,
and make you only mine
and keep their spirits guessing
what I’ll offer in good time
then I dress them in your features,
and make them change their ways,
but they’ll never be as you were
in those far flung, better days.

Copyright Â© Spike ... [ 2007-04-16 20:01:14]
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Re: Makeover (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Tuesday, 17th April 2007 @ 01:35:26 AM AEST
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well written, creative and clever!

love n' hugs nessa

Re: Makeover (User Rating: 1 )
by Vampirequeen on Tuesday, 17th April 2007 @ 11:42:53 AM AEST
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I say thats very clever and creative.
Damn great job spike.

Re: Makeover (User Rating: 1 )
by deadheadpoet on Tuesday, 17th April 2007 @ 01:58:17 PM AEST
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The picture is very sad and haunting. Visions of one's "realness", I see being taken away. Very intriguing write....a great read.
Peace,
Laura

Re: Makeover (User Rating: 1 )
by needledancing on Wednesday, 18th April 2007 @ 09:27:59 AM AEST
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Gee Spike is this the answer to my question of retaining my youth...lol I'm not quite up to this makeover...love this esp...but they'll never be as you were in those far flung, better days.
Great piece..trully.

Re: Makeover (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 23rd April 2007 @ 09:26:21 AM AEST
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I want to comment, S, but that picture is just too damn frightening!!!!

*runs away in fright*

*regains composure and returns*

okay .. ahem

moving on? or letting go? hmmmm .. seems like this piece
might be about a little of both. Your second stanza is haunting,
(though I know not if that was your intent). It just scares me to
a point that I'm unwilling to admit as of yet.

Accepting our fates .. our lots .. our "circumstance", is a hard
thing to do sometimes ... but still it is much like accepting ourselves
methinks.

Wow. Very thought-provoking Spike. A strong write indeed!

~Breezy

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