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[sid] => 133541
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Direction Unknown
[time] => 2007-04-15 13:47:55
[hometext] => Be careful what you wish for....
[bodytext] => Everything changes
yet here I remain
waiting
waiting for directions...
seems I've been sleeping
dreaming of
the good ol days,
I was standing still
not noticing
everyone had danced away.
I stop
and I pause
cause
I hear no noise.
No one seems to feel me at all
they only laugh and figure out ways
they could make me crawl,
I searched for love
but confusion was all that I got
so I stopped caring
and the flow
of mass production was blocked.
It's a mystery
but the confusion I need
because without it
there is no one
there is only me.
Where did everyone go
what was I thinking
when I told them
to go away?
I don't know
but I know
if they come back
I'm gonna tell them
that I was wrong.
Here I am in silence
listening
with my eyes
cause I
hear no noise,
and I
stop and pause...
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 315
[topic] => 43
[informant] => unknown_utopia
[notes] =>
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 30
[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => oops
)
Direction Unknown
Contributed by
unknown_utopia
on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 01:47:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Everything changes
yet here I remain
waiting
waiting for directions...
seems I've been sleeping
dreaming of
the good ol days,
I was standing still
not noticing
everyone had danced away.
I stop
and I pause
cause
I hear no noise.
No one seems to feel me at all
they only laugh and figure out ways
they could make me crawl,
I searched for love
but confusion was all that I got
so I stopped caring
and the flow
of mass production was blocked.
It's a mystery
but the confusion I need
because without it
there is no one
there is only me.
Where did everyone go
what was I thinking
when I told them
to go away?
I don't know
but I know
if they come back
I'm gonna tell them
that I was wrong.
Here I am in silence
listening
with my eyes
cause I
hear no noise,
and I
stop and pause...
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unknown_utopia
... [
2007-04-15 13:47:55]
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Re: Direction Unknown
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by emystar on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 02:22:09 PM AEST
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I hear ya, Tony.
Good writing even tho it's very sad.
Talk to me friend, You know I'm always here for you.
Big luv,
emy |
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Re: Direction Unknown
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by needledancing on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 03:28:38 PM AEST
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I love this piece. When I was in my 20's I loved nothing better than to sit in the bus depot and watch people....I am totally consumed by watching people...they teach me so much...this piece brought me back to those years..and yet I hear you in the silence..of having people about you...when they are gone..your thoughts return to you and then it is just you...alone is sometimes scary...somehow we need them there.
My thoughts provoked by this piece...and my thanks..for the provocation. Wonderful! |
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Re: Direction Unknown
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by Honey56 on
Monday, 16th April 2007 @ 02:19:08 AM AEST
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Sad but an awfully good write..I hate you have to hurt so much..But better days ahead..
Blessings.. |
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Re: Direction Unknown
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by raging_bull13 on
Monday, 16th April 2007 @ 03:35:44 AM AEST
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| yes very sad but good write |
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Re: Direction Unknown
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 16th April 2007 @ 07:57:43 AM AEST
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brilliant, full circle, flowing....
love n' hugs nessa |
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Re: Direction Unknown
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 16th April 2007 @ 10:49:23 AM AEST
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A sad and thought provoking write you have here. Sometimes we just want to be left alone, we don't want to hear anything, we don't want to do anything, we want everything to go away, but this all leads to lonliness, emptiness and silence. We need people around us my friend. Sometimes they even help us without us even noticing. It's a comfort knowing that they are there regardless of if we need them or not. I'm sorry I have rambled on so long my friend.
Very well penned. Wishing you much brighter days ahead~
*warm hugs*
sue m |
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Re: Direction Unknown
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by Crow on
Tuesday, 17th April 2007 @ 08:18:41 AM AEST
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I guess we can`t put others on hold"
a bit of blues in this, the ending shocked me to pay more attention. I like this, good write. Vincent |
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Re: Direction Unknown
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th April 2007 @ 11:00:58 AM AEST
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| Its true, you should be careful what you wish for. This was an awesome poem. Keep it up |
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Re: Direction Unknown
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by Bloodydragon on
Monday, 30th April 2007 @ 11:47:55 AM AEST
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sometimes i wish id stop and paused before reacting, but no point dwelling on my rights and wrongs, past is gone present is here future is unknown.
Awesome write, very visual, words with many meanings no matter how its looked at each new read awakens more passions and thoughts, you have a powerfully emotional and raw talent for awakening feelings with your words. |
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Re: Direction Unknown
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Wednesday, 16th May 2007 @ 03:55:07 AM AEST
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Deep.. This was beautifully written with sadness and confusion intertwining with the words.. Very well expressed and written..
Take care
Christina |
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