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[title] => alone in the dark
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its hot and
these windows of my mind
melting, they are
afraid to move
i might miss something
or not
drink something
cool soda, a draft upon
the feet
my toe rings
glistening in candlelight
i write by
something lets
go from deep within me
soul release
writing some more
hear cascading rain, brutal
then soft
back of my brain
holds softly strumming guitar
now piano
yet the music
of the rain is the most beautiful
of all
droplets splashing
entwining and fusing together
like a band
hearing a bird
chirping, yet it is blackest night
impossible
wondering
is my mind gone or going
and i ponder
where to?
i am so lost far beneath the surface
of myself
its a damn
good thing im a poetess
alone in the dark.
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alone in the dark
Contributed by
ladyfawn
on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 10:32:24 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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its hot and
these windows of my mind
melting, they are
afraid to move
i might miss something
or not
drink something
cool soda, a draft upon
the feet
my toe rings
glistening in candlelight
i write by
something lets
go from deep within me
soul release
writing some more
hear cascading rain, brutal
then soft
back of my brain
holds softly strumming guitar
now piano
yet the music
of the rain is the most beautiful
of all
droplets splashing
entwining and fusing together
like a band
hearing a bird
chirping, yet it is blackest night
impossible
wondering
is my mind gone or going
and i ponder
where to?
i am so lost far beneath the surface
of myself
its a damn
good thing im a poetess
alone in the dark.
§* *§
*|*
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ladyfawn
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Re: alone in the dark
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 10:41:40 AM AEST
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i love it.
all the beautiful metaphors. i love metaphors in poetry, it makes it more interesting.
great write
- Bethani - |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by FRANCO on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 10:49:12 AM AEST
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The easy flow of verses make this poem a very attractive one.
beautifully penned my friend.
FRANCO. |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by Crow on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 11:31:37 AM AEST
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| this write really creates images, and I think its wonderful others can take us home, to a shore, where they choose. great write. Vincent |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 01:50:33 PM AEST
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wow
Excellent. |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by emystar on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 02:33:31 PM AEST
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Goof work, girlfriend. Again it's great to have you back posting again. I really did miss you.
Keep up the good work.
huggs,
emy
I luv the sound of the rain, too. |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 02:50:16 PM AEST
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wow you did an excellent job on this one.
:) welcome back
hugs |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 07:09:53 PM AEST
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Nessa~it's so good to see you posting again my dear friend. You and your beautiful poetry have been missed alot around here.
A delightful piece of poetry filled with such beautiful metaphors and penned excellently word for word. Welcome back sweet girl~
love n hugs,
sue m |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by Rakerman1999 on
Monday, 16th April 2007 @ 03:01:13 AM AEST
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In the darkness or in the light , you remain a poetess supreme. I have missed your words my dear longtime friend. This has a feeling of deepest honesty ....a looking far beneath the surface of oneself.
Very well done
Roses at your feet Larry |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by shelby on
Monday, 16th April 2007 @ 03:26:50 AM AEST
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How I have missed your words my dear Nessa. YOu took me along with you into the dim lit room and dancing candle light and rain storms...... Beautiful.... Me thinks Ness isnt losing her mind either!!
Love ya
~Michelle~ |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by myheartsvoice on
Sunday, 22nd April 2007 @ 07:48:07 AM AEST
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I honestly have to say this was simply breath taking. Gleaming with such warm and heart touching emotions. I merely personafied you as this lady artist pondering by the sea. Simply put i'm awe struck and quite inspired. oh btw, I love rain. Beautiful, absolutely beautiful Nessa.
Ben
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Re: alone in the dark
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by DaveXerox on
Thursday, 26th April 2007 @ 09:24:55 PM AEST
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I like this a lot. It hints at the awesome power of nature (i.e. 'yet the music of the rain is the most beautiful of all') which really hit home to me during my recent travels in Africa.
Hugs to you too!
dAVe xx |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by doug on
Saturday, 28th April 2007 @ 11:41:35 PM AEST
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Truly enjoyed this poem. I love poems
where the poet takes you right into there
world. No longer a spectator but one who
has now participated in this moment in
your life. Awesome. Great work.
Truly , Doug |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by detourchick on
Monday, 30th April 2007 @ 07:23:47 AM AEST
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totally awesome metaphors
great write! |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by Honey56 on
Sunday, 20th May 2007 @ 09:01:18 AM AEST
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| Excellent write... |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by zenith66 on
Tuesday, 19th June 2007 @ 04:35:10 AM AEST
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One of the best ive ever read i too love the sound of rain and the darkness of night,
Nature brings out the emotions so wonderfully and you have written a brilliant piece here....
Fabulous!!!
Lar B |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by Renstar on
Saturday, 28th July 2007 @ 08:26:53 AM AEST
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| so beautiful...i really enjoyed this...thank you |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by unknown_utopia on
Monday, 9th June 2014 @ 09:20:35 PM AEST
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"i am so lost far beneath the surface
of myself"
I just love that line...
great write. |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by colinb on
Monday, 7th July 2014 @ 04:55:17 PM AEST
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| WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Re: alone in the dark
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 26th October 2014 @ 12:35:26 PM AEST
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Alone with your thoughts? You lucky gal ;) It sounds like the perfect environment for a poetic storm...such as this.
Wonderful.
~Scorp |
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