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[aid] => mick
[title] => If This Had Been A Test
[time] => 2007-04-13 16:17:32
[hometext] => The voice of Mothy's Avenger revisited me this evening and left a fairly strong impression
[bodytext] => If This Had Been A Test
(the above link will allow you to hear it)
If this had been a test
I would not rest
until my best
had been discovered,
recovered,
reclaimed
and my name
became famed,
proclaimed
to have gained
the notoriety
of my peers.
That they had heard
much of my words
and were
undisturbed
by the sound
of my voice,
my verb choice,
their lips were moist
with a passion
of a fashion that
they hadn’t felt
or dealt with
in years.
If this had been a test
I would suggest
that anything less
would fester
and infect
the rejected,
misdirected,
unprotected,
vivisected
machinations
of my deeply
seated fears.
It could bring to light
the dark of night
that tries to fight
its way out of my heart
and then impart
its will to start
to rebuild
the unfilled
chilled memories
held at bay,
in the event that they
might loose
unbidden tears.
If this had been a test
I must confess...
I might have
failed.
~ Nazmythian ~
[comments] => 11
[counter] => 804
[topic] => 38
[informant] => Nazmythian
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[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 30
[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Tributes
)
If This Had Been A Test
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Friday, 13th April 2007 @ 04:17:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
Tributes
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If This Had Been A Test
(the above link will allow you to hear it)
If this had been a test
I would not rest
until my best
had been discovered,
recovered,
reclaimed
and my name
became famed,
proclaimed
to have gained
the notoriety
of my peers.
That they had heard
much of my words
and were
undisturbed
by the sound
of my voice,
my verb choice,
their lips were moist
with a passion
of a fashion that
they hadn’t felt
or dealt with
in years.
If this had been a test
I would suggest
that anything less
would fester
and infect
the rejected,
misdirected,
unprotected,
vivisected
machinations
of my deeply
seated fears.
It could bring to light
the dark of night
that tries to fight
its way out of my heart
and then impart
its will to start
to rebuild
the unfilled
chilled memories
held at bay,
in the event that they
might loose
unbidden tears.
If this had been a test
I must confess...
I might have
failed.
~ Nazmythian ~
Copyright ©
Nazmythian
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2007-04-13 16:17:32]
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Re: If This Had Been A Test
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by venkat on
Friday, 13th April 2007 @ 05:16:58 PM AEST
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| Its like a dramatic monologue..nice flow. Welldone Naz..:-) venkat |
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Re: If This Had Been A Test
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th April 2007 @ 09:03:24 PM AEST
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Your writes never fail to impress me!
Wonderful rhyme scheme....memeorable! |
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Re: If This Had Been A Test
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 14th April 2007 @ 03:22:16 AM AEST
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Naz man, darn you. You are such a good writer. I loved the repetition of the the rhyming words. It comes out bold and in your face, but then the ending humbles me. Your heart is a good one, and your soul well traveled. Thanks for sharing....once again.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: If This Had Been A Test
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by emystar on
Saturday, 14th April 2007 @ 07:44:44 AM AEST
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Remarlable writing, my talented, friend.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: If This Had Been A Test
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by LoveStruck_Hippie on
Saturday, 14th April 2007 @ 08:49:35 AM AEST
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My dear,
I still feel that the printed word just does not do this piece justice. I would strongly encourage you to add an audio link to this piece.
The way you read it is so powerful.
*HUGS*
~Shannon |
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Re: If This Had Been A Test
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 07:24:05 AM AEST
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Oh wow Scott! I mean Oh Wow! I say Oh Wow because WOW!
Seriouly the way you have worked this piece is extraordinary! I saw it and was not sure what to expect considering the title. Because much can be stated using this term in a word play manner. And word play Scott, that you are a master of. Properly apparant here! As always I loved it.
BRAVO!
- Daniel |
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Re: If This Had Been A Test
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 09:39:47 AM AEST
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Damn you, Scott, I want to hear voices too!!!
*giggles*
You know, I love it when you hear this voice, your poems are like tiny explosions, and they really do make deep impressions. It's almost like you swallow dynamite.
As always, sir, I love your writing, and have missed reading and commenting on it (shame on me, I know!). It's almost like I forget how wonderful it is to read this... but then, each time I come back, it is so much better than the last time.
Good write, hun. As usual, this is a stunner.
Take care of you,
*hugs tight*
Phyllis xxx |
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Re: If This Had Been A Test
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 16th April 2007 @ 06:19:41 AM AEST
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Snazzy, you know you rock dude! (and never, I mean NEVER
could you have failed). Your style and wordsmithing
ever and always impress, hun. I am forever completely
satisfied when coming away from one of your writes.
Enriching, inspiring, and powerfully motivating.
You, my dear sir, are exceptioinal. Don't ever change. :)
*squeezies*
~Breezy |
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Re: If This Had Been A Test
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 17th April 2007 @ 02:59:29 PM AEST
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Lol wow Nazzy wow
You always seem to amaze me with your writes.I say besides venkat Billy and jecks orphues
you guys are the best writers here.
again wow |
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Re: If This Had Been A Test
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by needledancing on
Wednesday, 25th April 2007 @ 01:50:48 PM AEST
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| You once again have created a wonderful and extremely thought provoking piece.I enjoyed hearing this read as it then trully captures the feelings of the vocal quality to trully release its pure thought. |
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Re: If This Had Been A Test
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by JamesStockdale on
Friday, 7th August 2020 @ 03:17:14 PM AEST
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| Awesome! |
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