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There was a story in the way you held yourself, a tale
for the square-ness of your shoulders and hands hidden in pockets,
that I so wanted to know.
But it was the eyes that got me.
Surprised, because I never really noticed
such silly things.
Kindness in such a hard face,
mixed with insecurities and a self esteem low enough
to trip over.

So I took you home, took off your jacket,
and saw the dirt-gray wings
hidden under, pressed to a dark shirt that clung onto
skin and bones.

And your smile offered only honesty
and a night not spent alone.

So you kissed me once,
and though I asked
You wouldn’t tell me why God took away your words;
so I kissed you twice
and gave you mine.
- Then you sang me a song
raw and reminiscent of a time you had been loved
and lost.

We dozed with the rain,
and I found the perfect pillow
in the crook of your elbows.
And I didn’t want them,
but you left me your wings while I was sleeping.

You were up and out before dawn,
Black jacket on and pale as ever.
And in the haze of waking moments, I know heard you say thank you,
but I never heard you say goodbye.
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hold on to This.

Contributed by keilantra on Friday, 13th April 2007 @ 09:40:28 AM in AEST
Topic: oops

_________________

There was a story in the way you held yourself, a tale
for the square-ness of your shoulders and hands hidden in pockets,
that I so wanted to know.
But it was the eyes that got me.
Surprised, because I never really noticed
such silly things.
Kindness in such a hard face,
mixed with insecurities and a self esteem low enough
to trip over.

So I took you home, took off your jacket,
and saw the dirt-gray wings
hidden under, pressed to a dark shirt that clung onto
skin and bones.

And your smile offered only honesty
and a night not spent alone.

So you kissed me once,
and though I asked
You wouldn’t tell me why God took away your words;
so I kissed you twice
and gave you mine.
- Then you sang me a song
raw and reminiscent of a time you had been loved
and lost.

We dozed with the rain,
and I found the perfect pillow
in the crook of your elbows.
And I didn’t want them,
but you left me your wings while I was sleeping.

You were up and out before dawn,
Black jacket on and pale as ever.
And in the haze of waking moments, I know heard you say thank you,
but I never heard you say goodbye.

Copyright Â© keilantra ... [ 2007-04-13 09:40:28]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: hold on to This. (User Rating: 1 )
by Gravehorn on Friday, 13th April 2007 @ 11:03:13 AM AEST
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I don't usually enjoy poems written without a rhyme scheme because they seem to be more of a story than a poem. Yours on the otherhand was written well and flowed very nicely for the most part. It did tell a story and was very comprehensible. Nicely done.

Re: hold on to This. (User Rating: 1 )
by Dom on Saturday, 14th April 2007 @ 02:25:48 AM AEST
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I absolutely adored this poem for the images and character you create. I was able to empathise with this poem and I was left wanting to know more.

Very good write,
Dom

Re: hold on to This. (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 07:42:31 AM AEST
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Oh My God This was Brilliant! WHOA!!!

I read this wonderful work traveling along until I came across a road block that actually struck me in a way that my eyes became glazed with complete awe!

So you kissed me once,
and though I asked
You wouldn’t tell me why God took away your words;
so I kissed you twice
and gave you mine.
- Then you sang me a song
raw and reminiscent of a time you had been loved
and lost.

And though the piece stands as a wonderful magnificent work that is what took the mood and idea from good work Kei, to OH MY GOD THIS WAS BRILLIANT! Wow, that basically floored me. What a tremendos job young poet! You never cease to impress.

BRAVO (a thousand times)

- Daniel

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