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[aid] => mick
[title] => Disconnection
[time] => 2007-04-10 19:14:05
[hometext] => Based on recent life events.
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The air in this room so thick
with mournful exhales
Eyes of blue with tears
set perched like diamonds
on the edge.
Waiting to tumble....
and take their fall
Mistakes made and
now both pay
for things in which neither
can understand
Lost slightly
in the haze of moments
Where were we....
in some far off land?
April 2007
Laura Horner
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Disconnection
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deadheadpoet
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Tuesday, 10th April 2007 @ 07:14:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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The air in this room so thick
with mournful exhales
Eyes of blue with tears
set perched like diamonds
on the edge.
Waiting to tumble....
and take their fall
Mistakes made and
now both pay
for things in which neither
can understand
Lost slightly
in the haze of moments
Where were we....
in some far off land?
April 2007
Laura Horner
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2007-04-10 19:14:05]
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Re: Disconnection
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 10th April 2007 @ 08:08:53 PM AEST
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Top write, Laura. Poignant, anguished, with the perfect ending - were we that distant not to notice, not to realize. A state of affairs keen and heartfelt in itself, yet abstract and indeterminate enough to apply to many tragedies.
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Re: Disconnection
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by Crow on
Tuesday, 10th April 2007 @ 10:33:20 PM AEST
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Hi my friend, my" I have read this several times and its not enough for me. flawless.
...Vincent
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Re: Disconnection
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 11th April 2007 @ 12:31:11 AM AEST
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Laura the emotion in this is overpowering, but the
beautiful and flawless way you put it into words is
completely stunning!
Write, dear poet. Emotion and passion such as yours
needs a channel. And your creative side is reaping
the benefits of your enormous heart.
Truly amazing.
~Breezy |
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Re: Disconnection
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by Dom on
Wednesday, 11th April 2007 @ 01:40:24 AM AEST
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Absolutely overflowing with emotion, Breezy is right - you have channelled your life experiences into beautiful, heartfelt poems.
The description in this is exquisite, and it is wonderful because it can be applied to more than one situation.
Take care,
Dom |
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Re: Disconnection
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 11th April 2007 @ 02:19:55 AM AEST
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wow such powerfulness of emotions and feelings this is breathtakingly sad.. I absolutely love the ending.. so beautifully sadly written
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: Disconnection
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by positivelypurple on
Wednesday, 11th April 2007 @ 09:54:20 AM AEST
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| Amazing imagery...very simple and very powerful. Beautiful and elegant. |
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Re: Disconnection
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 11th April 2007 @ 04:16:38 PM AEST
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Laura~
An outstanding write overflowing with emotion. I absolutely love the way you have put it in words. Writing helps us to heal my dear friend and you I must say have penned this write exquisitely~
Well done and thanks so much for sharing it with us.
love, hugs & prayers,
sue m |
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Re: Disconnection
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 11th April 2007 @ 09:19:09 PM AEST
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Leaves me with that strong feeling of ...where do we go from here?....
So powerful with just so few words! |
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Re: Disconnection
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 06:53:33 AM AEST
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deeply powerful, exquisite write:)
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Disconnection
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 09:51:43 AM AEST
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Oh sweetie... I'm so proud of you, you know?
You are handling and dealing with this so much better than I ever could. You are stronger than you know, hun, and it shows in your writing, it really does.
This is a painful write, hun... the uncertainty is the worst, I think... but I know you can get through it.
Be strong, k?
Here for you, as always.
Lots of love,
Phyllis xxx |
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Re: Disconnection
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by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 01:58:20 PM AEST
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yessss
there is power in this flow. |
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Re: Disconnection
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Friday, 20th April 2007 @ 03:29:55 AM AEST
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This was a good poem. You did a great job. I can feel your thoughts and feelings.
Great poem.
Take care
Christina |
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