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[title] => Hydro-somnambuli-phobia
[time] => 2007-04-07 13:25:42
[hometext] => I could dedicate this, but I’d surely have to pay for it later, and I find myself unwilling to foot that bill.
[bodytext] => Hydro-somnambuli-phobia
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He…
is a half-wit,
half unwittingly afraid…
afraid of sleep,
the other half,
full-well knowing
that at some point
he will have to…
(half too?)
He very nearly drowned
once, or maybe twice?
Those recollections
were emblazoned upon a
young, impressionable mind,
and he remembers…
all those things that
sleep might bring and
strolling through the
turbulent dream-scape
of his mind, where
black rainbows arc’d
magestically across
a tortured sky.
He fell into a pool
of pity and lost his breath,
and as with all such things
so traumatic, cannot recall
the grace that saved him…
only that he was.
Ultimately, with each fall
his growth was stunted,
for he never truly learned
that he could indeed swim.
So now he lives in fear
of sleep walking…
into water.
~ Nazmythian ~
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Hydro-somnambuli-phobia
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Nazmythian
on
Saturday, 7th April 2007 @ 01:25:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
sarcasticpoetry
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Hydro-somnambuli-phobia
(click the link above to hear it)
He…
is a half-wit,
half unwittingly afraid…
afraid of sleep,
the other half,
full-well knowing
that at some point
he will have to…
(half too?)
He very nearly drowned
once, or maybe twice?
Those recollections
were emblazoned upon a
young, impressionable mind,
and he remembers…
all those things that
sleep might bring and
strolling through the
turbulent dream-scape
of his mind, where
black rainbows arc’d
magestically across
a tortured sky.
He fell into a pool
of pity and lost his breath,
and as with all such things
so traumatic, cannot recall
the grace that saved him…
only that he was.
Ultimately, with each fall
his growth was stunted,
for he never truly learned
that he could indeed swim.
So now he lives in fear
of sleep walking…
into water.
~ Nazmythian ~
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Nazmythian
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Re: Hydro-somnambuli-phobia
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by emystar on
Saturday, 7th April 2007 @ 01:46:08 PM AEST
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Nazzy your writing goes deep, deep, deep into the waters of life and still comes up to the shore.
Great writing, my friend as always.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Hydro-somnambuli-phobia
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by Butterat_Zool on
Saturday, 7th April 2007 @ 08:07:26 PM AEST
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Witty. I'm not much of a somnambulist, so i'm personally more afraid of water sleepwalking into me. A well-told story with several possible interpretations. You use your vague points and symbolism well, and your restraint (it's so easy to overdo the nebulous) is what makes this poem. Nicely done.
BZ. |
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Re: Hydro-somnambuli-phobia
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by needledancing on
Saturday, 7th April 2007 @ 10:55:04 PM AEST
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Well written piece.Most enjoyable line..he fell into a pool of self pity and lost his breath and as with all such things so traumatic,cannot recall the grace that saved him...only that he was.I think many can recall this space and be held in fear indefinately. Fear will forever hold us back until mastered.
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Re: Hydro-somnambuli-phobia
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by shelby on
Sunday, 8th April 2007 @ 08:04:59 AM AEST
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Yet again you reached into the depths of inner most thought, leaving a trail of thoughts to ponder on. Oh yes and fear itself, gripping .
Well I wont babble on, as always I loved it!
~Michelle~ |
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Re: Hydro-somnambuli-phobia
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 8th April 2007 @ 10:32:49 AM AEST
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Wow. As usual my brother, you have blown me away with your writing. (I do so love it.) I'm thinking so hard in my own mind, (just where this piece took me), about extinguishing fears, living with them is treacherous, though it seems so hard to tread water sometimes. Enjoyed the read.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: Hydro-somnambuli-phobia
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th April 2007 @ 11:17:51 AM AEST
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Amazing! You sir, have a talent I most definitely am envious of in many ways. Not quite sure yet what to say about this piece, so another comment will come. But I could not let this night pass without telling you that I was floored and completely thrilled to read this work.
BRAVO!
SCM |
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Re: Hydro-somnambuli-phobia
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 18th April 2007 @ 05:22:21 AM AEST
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ooo i love this! what a deeply fabulous write!
love n' hugs nessa |
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