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[aid] => mick
[title] => To The Roses
[time] => 2007-02-27 20:33:13
[hometext] => I had to post something. Anything. And so I came with nothing.
[bodytext] => I want to scream.
(And break my voice with jagged edges...)
...Get down on my knees and pray,
just stay there till I'm old and grey,
until I feel life fade away...
[...just wither down into the ground,
and give myself to all the roses.]
I'm broken in with all the weeping,
It hurts the sky I hear it screaming.
Is the world still melting round me,
or is it God has somehow found me?
{Lost within this painful dream,
where once reality had been. }
I feel it still, his soul is tearing,
I pray to God to hear his cries,
And though he says he's hardly bleeding
I see the pain still in his eyes.
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[counter] => 606
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[informant] => lostinmyself
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[score] => 35
[ratings] => 7
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
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To The Roses
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 08:33:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I want to scream.
(And break my voice with jagged edges...)
...Get down on my knees and pray,
just stay there till I'm old and grey,
until I feel life fade away...
[...just wither down into the ground,
and give myself to all the roses.]
I'm broken in with all the weeping,
It hurts the sky I hear it screaming.
Is the world still melting round me,
or is it God has somehow found me?
{Lost within this painful dream,
where once reality had been. }
I feel it still, his soul is tearing,
I pray to God to hear his cries,
And though he says he's hardly bleeding
I see the pain still in his eyes.
Copyright ©
lostinmyself
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2007-02-27 20:33:13]
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Re: To The Roses
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 08:47:21 PM AEST
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Sweetie .. I only wish my somethings could be more of your
nothings !!
This was painful, at best, to read. (even moreso the second time
'round --though I know not why).
I love every single part of this .. as it is so very different from anything I've
read .. but the reference to giving yourself to the roses .. I can't get that
out of my head. I feel that so deeply ~
You have always had the ability to capture emotion in the most
incredible way. Exceptional hun. I am truly inspired!
*hugs*
~Breezy |
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Re: To The Roses
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 09:41:09 PM AEST
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i agree with breezy
philly girl you are an awsome poet and i wish someday i can be as good as you.
hugs |
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Re: To The Roses
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by Oneir8dude on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 10:03:17 PM AEST
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Sparky,
It pains me to read this and picture you...
But I did both...
You definitely are a poet and a half...
Maybe if you had no pain you wouldn’t
Have anything to write about…
Love ya Sis
Bill
(who’s wishing he could help)
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Re: To The Roses
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by SeXyDrAgOn on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 10:57:56 PM AEST
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| I have to agree that you are a poet and a half, I am truly glad I popped in to read this, very emotional |
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Re: To The Roses
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by SilverDagger on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 11:20:43 PM AEST
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...Get down on my knees and pray,
just stay there till I'm old and grey,
until I feel life fade away...
Excellent verses!
Your 'nothing' portrays a clear picture of the darkness and pain that you are going through. I sincerely hope that you get out of it. Being 'broken in with all the weeping', will not make it stop, but only bring on more of it.
May you be at peace with yourself soon. It would be a shame to have such a wonderful poet suffer so, even if it does bring forth such profound words. |
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Re: To The Roses
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 11:22:07 PM AEST
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I'll say this ... perhaps you came with nothing ....
But you left us with something Phabulous !!!
Nazzy ~
( echoes of "The Wind" ... *Rrrrocksie* I wish nothing from me became something like this ) |
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Re: To The Roses
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Wednesday, 28th February 2007 @ 07:03:42 AM AEST
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Hey Philly. This poem was amazing. I like the way that it was written. .Truthful and raw.
Take care
Christina-xo |
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Re: To The Roses
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 28th February 2007 @ 10:44:47 AM AEST
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...."Get down into the ground....give myself to the roses." On the positive side one could equate that phrase with ...die to self so one can be found alive in Christ....Know matter how long we are on our knees God is always there; and He never loses track of us, although we don't alwalys keep track of Him.
Well done, makes you think and reflect
Will |
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 28th February 2007 @ 01:20:42 PM AEST
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i agree with the others.. this was well penned out for nothing so full of inner emotion.. wonderful job
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: To The Roses
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 21st March 2007 @ 10:10:36 PM AEST
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Gosh lil sis, you have so many wonderful...tearing...wonderful lines in here.
So...so full of emotion.
Much more than nothing.... |
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Re: To The Roses
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 23rd March 2007 @ 03:59:17 AM AEST
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Sweetheart it pains me so to read such heart breaking words coming from your pen.
You think you came up with nothing hun, but you sure left your reading with an emotionally packed masterpiece that pulls at the heart strings. I wished somehow I could take away your pain and the tears that fall from your eyes and replace them with laughter, joy & happiness. May your pain subside and your heart heal real soon my sweet & dear friend.
Much love , hugs n prayers to you PhillyGirl~
Sue M |
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Re: To The Roses
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 15th April 2007 @ 07:32:29 AM AEST
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even in something so painful your beauty shines through, exquisite as ever,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: To The Roses
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd April 2007 @ 02:40:23 AM AEST
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Well the only criticism I could ever offer on such an amazing piece is that this should have been left under "Emotional Poetry" because WOW the gut wrenching emotion. I mean WOW! So sad, tragic, real and a deep river of blood has been poured in this work. Wonderful job dear poet! The poem had me all the way, but the final stanza simply floored me! AMAZING!
Bravo!
SCM |
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Re: To The Roses
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by Ruby2sdy on
Saturday, 28th April 2007 @ 10:07:44 AM AEST
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only a poet can bring something from nothing; this one has a sinister edge to it; I really like... fan-blooming-tastic; as always;
2sdyxxx |
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Re: To The Roses
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 17th May 2007 @ 11:00:16 AM AEST
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A dream is a doubled edge sw o rd. Sometimes our dreams are worse then our life and other times they are an escape to a better life. This poem speaks of a lo t of pain....well written.
Will |
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