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Array ( [sid] => 132116 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => To a girl [time] => 2007-02-25 21:10:27 [hometext] => [bodytext] => I don't care
I'm not trying

I don't need a friend
I don't care
If you let me in

If you do
I will be here
If you did
I retract what I said

If you don't
If you don't
Well all is fair

I'm not trying
Cuz I care
That's my pain

If you did
I would tear

Fall down and break the walls
Learn to encumber everything
For your world

Cuz, I seen something
In your life
The way you are
I wonder but not to much



I don't want to stay
I don't want to stay
So I'm not trying







You know I just moved here
And it was by kindness that you met me

I am just a sulk
Listen to
I don't know
But if it was you
I can't say

All I remember
Is I don't want to stay





Get a ****** *** job
Earn some money
Go back home






I'm not
I'm not
Going to fall for you
I won't unless you do

I try not to think so much
When it is you
I say don't let it be

I'm tearing down walls
Knowing I need to go home









So strange
with this being the place I start
I feel 3 hours away from my life

I torn down walls
Drank a lot of alcohol

And when I get here
I find you

I want to go
I can not stay


But when I look at you
I don't know about tomorrow

[comments] => 2 [counter] => 146 [topic] => 43 [informant] => Rhei76 [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => oops )
To a girl

Contributed by Rhei76 on Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 09:10:27 PM in AEST
Topic: oops



I don't care
I'm not trying

I don't need a friend
I don't care
If you let me in

If you do
I will be here
If you did
I retract what I said

If you don't
If you don't
Well all is fair

I'm not trying
Cuz I care
That's my pain

If you did
I would tear

Fall down and break the walls
Learn to encumber everything
For your world

Cuz, I seen something
In your life
The way you are
I wonder but not to much



I don't want to stay
I don't want to stay
So I'm not trying







You know I just moved here
And it was by kindness that you met me

I am just a sulk
Listen to
I don't know
But if it was you
I can't say

All I remember
Is I don't want to stay





Get a ****** *** job
Earn some money
Go back home






I'm not
I'm not
Going to fall for you
I won't unless you do

I try not to think so much
When it is you
I say don't let it be

I'm tearing down walls
Knowing I need to go home









So strange
with this being the place I start
I feel 3 hours away from my life

I torn down walls
Drank a lot of alcohol

And when I get here
I find you

I want to go
I can not stay


But when I look at you
I don't know about tomorrow





Copyright © Rhei76 ... [ 2007-02-25 21:10:27]
(Date/Time posted on site)





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Re: To a girl (User Rating: 1 )
by myheartsvoice on Monday, 26th February 2007 @ 01:53:40 PM AEST
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This > " So strange
with this being the place I start
I feel 3 hours away from my life" was a most compelling line. In all very direct and quite powerful. nicely done.


Ben



Re: To a girl (User Rating: 1 )
by darkangeleyes57 on Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 07:24:41 AM AEST
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This was really good. I liked the way that you wrote this and set up each line. It made the reading fun. I think that you did a wonderful job expressing yourself here. And I have to agree those lines were really amazing.

Take care
Christina




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