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[title] => i tried to walk on water
[time] => 2007-02-24 00:23:40
[hometext] => for someone who tried to make me feel like i wasn't good enough
[bodytext] => i tried to walk on water
but i nearly drowned;
tried to confess my many sins
but couldn't make a sound.
i wanted to be the virgin
you were looking for,
but i was always better suited
for the part of the whore.
i placed myself upon your cross
withstanding many pains,
but on that cross my spirit died
and never rose again.
you told me you could only love
someone as good as you,
but offer all i really am
was all i could ever do.
i prayed for you to want me;
so many nights down on my knees,
but a mouthful of regret and guilt
was all i ever received.
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i tried to walk on water
Contributed by
priss
on
Saturday, 24th February 2007 @ 12:23:40 AM in AEST
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i tried to walk on water
but i nearly drowned;
tried to confess my many sins
but couldn't make a sound.
i wanted to be the virgin
you were looking for,
but i was always better suited
for the part of the whore.
i placed myself upon your cross
withstanding many pains,
but on that cross my spirit died
and never rose again.
you told me you could only love
someone as good as you,
but offer all i really am
was all i could ever do.
i prayed for you to want me;
so many nights down on my knees,
but a mouthful of regret and guilt
was all i ever received.
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priss
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Re: i tried to walk on water
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by emystar on
Saturday, 24th February 2007 @ 12:36:19 AM AEST
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Very sad but great writing.
Sweet heart, I've learned to run from these kindssa folks.
Anyone that does these things are suffering from a huge case of low self estem and when they put themselves on the line like thes they are only trying to cover their own flaws and in fact will keep bringing you down. Do not let um break you.
big huggs. prayer, strength,
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Re: i tried to walk on water
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by yangdantien on
Saturday, 24th February 2007 @ 02:52:30 PM AEST
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This is very good and heartfelt, a lesson has been truly learned here. You don't have to run from those types just say No with conviction sticking to your guns. They are an insidious, manipulative bunch working their way into our subconscious as a power trip. This piece is a milestone to being able to sniff those types out and how to see them coming so you can tell them to keep walking.
Well Done
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Re: i tried to walk on water
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by Dom on
Saturday, 24th February 2007 @ 04:00:35 PM AEST
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This is really good, so powerful and heartfelt and serves as a clever warning about the pitfalls of being in a relationship like this with somebody who can't appreciate you for who you really are, and you try so hard to change for them but it never works because you aren't the one who needs to change. Just keep your head above the water...
Take care,
Dom |
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Re: i tried to walk on water
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by Keilantra on
Saturday, 24th February 2007 @ 07:43:48 PM AEST
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this si something i can really relate to, and i love how you've made a subject like this so original, when so many have tried to write like this. real and raw, this is talent.
keep it up
xXx
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Re: i tried to walk on water
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by Bleedthelove on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 01:43:44 PM AEST
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| I felt the emotion of your words. Nicely expressed and very well written. |
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Re: i tried to walk on water
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 2nd March 2007 @ 05:22:19 PM AEST
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oh hun .. this is heartwrenching!
I am so sorry that anyone ever has to feel .. well .. not
good enough. It is both shameful and contemptible
that there are those, still of the opinion that they are
of better breeding or quality of human being than others.
It is unfathomable to me.
Your emotion was expressed well and I hope that
through this, (and a bit of soul searching) that you
find peace and a self-awareness that never allows
another being to belittle what and who you are!!
"That which is beautiful is not always good .. but
that which is good is ALWAYS beautiful. "
*hugs*
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Re: i tried to walk on water
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 12:01:12 PM AEST
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"someone as good as you," Do ;you mean he can walk on water. Good riddance. Move forward. Uh this is good too.
wabl
KenMoore
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