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[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Unmasked...
[time] => 2007-01-23 00:29:49
[hometext] => Why can't you see me...asked again...
[bodytext] =>
My voice grew ever softer~
as away fell every mask
What truth I have to offer~
you have only for to ask...
And if it is other than I~
that you continue to see
Know your own to be my lie~
for never you shall I deceive...
Then the gaze I'd not let falter~
from the time that I'd begun
To lowered one I altered~
as my say with I was done...
No comfort held the silence~
that lengthened as we listened
While thoughts suffered their own violence~
till eyes met eyes that glistened...
[comments] => 11
[counter] => 487
[topic] => 61
[informant] => misfitme
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 64
[ratings] => 14
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
)
Unmasked...
Contributed by
misfitme
on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 12:29:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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My voice grew ever softer~
as away fell every mask
What truth I have to offer~
you have only for to ask...
And if it is other than I~
that you continue to see
Know your own to be my lie~
for never you shall I deceive...
Then the gaze I'd not let falter~
from the time that I'd begun
To lowered one I altered~
as my say with I was done...
No comfort held the silence~
that lengthened as we listened
While thoughts suffered their own violence~
till eyes met eyes that glistened...
Copyright ©
misfitme
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2007-01-23 00:29:49]
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Re: Unmasked...
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by sadaddy on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 04:50:02 AM AEST
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but yet you have been seen with those eyes that glistened which has captured our eyes to see this wonderfully write.
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Re: Unmasked...
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 09:07:31 AM AEST
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| First contact is often not when first we meet but perhaps when first we see. |
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Re: Unmasked...
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 09:56:19 AM AEST
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wow i really like this piece.. its very emotinal and powerful. I especially liked the ending
vampyress JENNI |
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Re: Unmasked...
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 06:15:33 PM AEST
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I enjoyed this ..... till eyes met and glistened.
It seems some people dont want to really see us they rather live in the world of a mask.
I cannot do those things, I need to just be me and throw away the many masks I have been taught to wear.... Incredible write.
Michelle |
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Re: Unmasked...
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by yangdantien on
Wednesday, 24th January 2007 @ 01:14:27 AM AEST
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So much pain and doubt occurs under this line:
"...While thoughts suffered their own violence~..."
Breathe free of the mask and set your soul to task for it is in the depth of such eye contact that new directions appear.
Beautiful
Peace
AJ |
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Re: Unmasked...
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 24th January 2007 @ 04:42:31 PM AEST
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Sweet MissyMe sometimes we feel we need to hide behind a mask. I refuse to do this for if somebody doesn't like me for who I really am they can go & get stuffed~ You my sweet friend need no mask to hide behind. You are an incredible lady. You are special and unique. Never let anybody tell you any different you hear me. An incredible and outstanding write. Well done Moon Maiden~
love, hugs n prayers,
sue m |
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Re: Unmasked...
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by Jen54 on
Wednesday, 24th January 2007 @ 11:56:39 PM AEST
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Awsome write. The way you worded it just drew me in.
-Jen |
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Re: Unmasked...
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by myheartsvoice on
Saturday, 27th January 2007 @ 12:43:38 AM AEST
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This is very intense to say the least, i enjoyed reading it. You do some serious work deep and passionate. Well done realy.
myheartsvoice |
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Re: Unmasked...
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 10th February 2007 @ 07:48:15 PM AEST
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I find it quite interesting that this falls under "self-struggle" ..
This could be a conversation with the reflection in the
mirror. A battle of inner emotion and need. Self-acceptance
vs. what you feel is expected ~
Love, acceptance and beauty FILL our world when we give those
things to ourselves first. It aides in our belief in ourselves, and there
is nothing more attractive than self-confidence.
Very thought provoking and incredibly poetically penned.
~Breezy |
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Re: Unmasked...
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 17th March 2007 @ 05:47:58 PM AEST
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The more I read your work the more I start to enjoy your play on the English language; like a lil personalized stamp on your work! I liked this piece quite a bit; well done.
~Scorp. |
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Re: Unmasked...
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by JohnRhinem on
Saturday, 9th August 2014 @ 05:44:22 PM AEST
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| i can definitely relate to glistening eyes inside, gazing back at mine ~ It's beautiful girl! |
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