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By: Jen

Drip, drip, drip
Another scar
is added to her arm

As the rain slashed
Against her window
Another crimson tear
Fell to the ground

She never dared let
Anyone see that scar
Or the other ones
So she hid the perfectly

Not a soul realized
She was hurting inside
So yet another crimson tear
Hit the floor
As the rain slashed at her door

She’ll never let those
Crimson tears be seen
So she cleans them up
Perfectly

When she stands in the rain
She is able to cry out her pain
Her tears spill from her eyes
She loves the rain
Because she is able to hide
The pain inside perfectly

Scars, crimson puddles, and tears
Are easy for her to hide
But also easy for someone else
To notice if they care enough
No matter how
Perfectly she hides

So far no one has noticed her
Scars, crimson puddles, or tears
She’s guessing no one cares

Hopefully someone will notice
How perfectly she hides
Before she closes her eyes for good this time

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Hides Perfectly

Contributed by Jen_unknown_to_myself on Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 01:32:24 AM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry

“Hides Perfectly”
By: Jen

Drip, drip, drip
Another scar
is added to her arm

As the rain slashed
Against her window
Another crimson tear
Fell to the ground

She never dared let
Anyone see that scar
Or the other ones
So she hid the perfectly

Not a soul realized
She was hurting inside
So yet another crimson tear
Hit the floor
As the rain slashed at her door

She’ll never let those
Crimson tears be seen
So she cleans them up
Perfectly

When she stands in the rain
She is able to cry out her pain
Her tears spill from her eyes
She loves the rain
Because she is able to hide
The pain inside perfectly

Scars, crimson puddles, and tears
Are easy for her to hide
But also easy for someone else
To notice if they care enough
No matter how
Perfectly she hides

So far no one has noticed her
Scars, crimson puddles, or tears
She’s guessing no one cares

Hopefully someone will notice
How perfectly she hides
Before she closes her eyes for good this time

Copyright Â© Jen_unknown_to_myself ... [ 2007-01-01 01:32:24]
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Re: Hides Perfectly (User Rating: 1 )
by blindchoice on Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 01:47:12 AM AEST
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Wow. I loved it. expecially that fact that you used crimson instred of red....great write.

Re: Hides Perfectly (User Rating: 1 )
by SilverDagger on Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 06:15:14 AM AEST
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That was one deep poem. I loved it.

Drip, drip, drip
Another scar
is added to her arm

She never dared let
Anyone see that scar
Or the other ones
So she hid the perfectly

Not a soul realized
She was hurting inside
So yet another crimson tear
Hit the floor
As the rain slashed at her door

I can perfectly identify with those lines. Your development of the theme is particularly impressive. Keep it up (the writing, not the cutting)!

Re: Hides Perfectly (User Rating: 1 )
by falcon on Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 11:18:04 AM AEST
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Wow, Jen, I think it's very powerful. And I hope it's not how you are feeling, but if it is, know that there are people who do care....

Re: Hides Perfectly (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 03:49:35 PM AEST
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Tears cleanse the soul as rain cleanses the earth. Writing such powerful words mends the heart, so days or easier to withstand.
Put down the knife, pick up that pen and let it sing as it has done here. Mend the wounded soul hun mend the wounded soul.

Blessing, love and peace be yours

~Michelle~

Re: Hides Perfectly (User Rating: 1 )
by EddieDean on Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 04:39:58 PM AEST
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Jen~

A good write here sweetheart, its oh so sad, but very well written. Cutting yourself may help you deal with pain, but writing and expressing your heartache in other ways are much more healthy.

Hopefully someone will notice
How perfectly she hides
Before she closes her eyes for good this time

We do care, I do care. You are a dear friend of everyone on this site and we notice your pain. There is no need to hide it anymore, let out and let it go.

Mike

Re: Hides Perfectly (User Rating: 1 )
by unknown_utopia on Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 07:40:54 PM AEST
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wow is right,
so powerful is this flow
excellent excellent write.

Re: Hides Perfectly (User Rating: 1 )
by PhantomVampyress on Tuesday, 2nd January 2007 @ 02:57:32 PM AEST
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wow this is a very creative write on people who cut themselves.. this by far is probably the most creative original write on this i've read.. great job!!

vampyress Jenni

Re: Hides Perfectly (User Rating: 1 )
by broken_blade on Friday, 14th December 2007 @ 05:16:15 PM AEST
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Great Poem!!!!! I love the style and the descriptive wording you added to the poem! Great job! and ya it definately can relate to the broken blade poem as well! thanks again and keep up the good stuff!

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