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[catid] => 1
[aid] => Mick
[title] => Forgotten
[time] => 2003-02-18 04:00:00
[hometext] => * This is the first poem I've ever written on the computer. It was actually started on the chat room here and due to a great effort by Karoody, Roisin, and Tier it was saved! So enjoy!!!!*
[bodytext] => Slowly depression wraps its quilt around me
As i realize i can never quite be the man i want to be
I slump to the ground
Maybe here i'll be found
Aided abetted regreted
My eyes turn red
Tears pour down my heart, every second
Like a chronic to my destiny i'm beckoned
I hate my insecurities, as well as myself
It's like i'm forgotten dusty and lying on a shelf
Strap me to a tree
Whip me, never set me free,
I'm in bondage to these pills
Warped by their dark wills
For my life I panic and scream
For goodness... oh thats only a dream
Don't think I can live like this anymore
Eyes are scared, broken to my very core
My eyes are dry, from all the crying
My muscles are weak, from all the trying
Looking around, scared, alone, lonely, afraid
Shaped by the world I'm formed and made
Helping my friends doing what I thought was right,
But now I'm torn to shreds robbed of my sight
Weeping in the coldness of my room
Lonely awaiting my coming doom
Sobbing, slumped against my wall
Awaiting my inevitable fall
Pointless giving up where did I go wrong?
Tired of listening to my mournful song
And constantly forgetting about myself
[comments] => 15
[counter] => 237
[topic] => 32
[informant] => bobotheclown
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 15
[ratings] => 3
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => SadPoetry
)
Forgotten
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Tuesday, 18th February 2003 @ 04:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Slowly depression wraps its quilt around me
As i realize i can never quite be the man i want to be
I slump to the ground
Maybe here i'll be found
Aided abetted regreted
My eyes turn red
Tears pour down my heart, every second
Like a chronic to my destiny i'm beckoned
I hate my insecurities, as well as myself
It's like i'm forgotten dusty and lying on a shelf
Strap me to a tree
Whip me, never set me free,
I'm in bondage to these pills
Warped by their dark wills
For my life I panic and scream
For goodness... oh thats only a dream
Don't think I can live like this anymore
Eyes are scared, broken to my very core
My eyes are dry, from all the crying
My muscles are weak, from all the trying
Looking around, scared, alone, lonely, afraid
Shaped by the world I'm formed and made
Helping my friends doing what I thought was right,
But now I'm torn to shreds robbed of my sight
Weeping in the coldness of my room
Lonely awaiting my coming doom
Sobbing, slumped against my wall
Awaiting my inevitable fall
Pointless giving up where did I go wrong?
Tired of listening to my mournful song
And constantly forgetting about myself
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
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2003-02-18 04:00:00]
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Re: Forgotten
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Tuesday, 18th February 2003 @ 04:06:41 AM AEST
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Lovely write, Joel... Lots of great writes have been started in chats...
Jenni |
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Re: Forgotten
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 18th February 2003 @ 05:06:10 AM AEST
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| A great write.. there is so much hidden beauty and humbleness and tears.. Thanks for sharing a beautiful poem .. venkat |
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Re: Forgotten
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by wyrd_faerie on
Tuesday, 18th February 2003 @ 05:20:22 AM AEST
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| oh my god...this is an absolutely amazing poem...oh my god...i have tears in my eyes...this is one of the best poems i have ever read...oh... |
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Re: Forgotten
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by Tanna on
Tuesday, 18th February 2003 @ 08:43:37 AM AEST
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| I'm very glad this poem was "saved", it's excellent! It's also heart wrenching :( |
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Re: Forgotten
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by karoody on
Tuesday, 18th February 2003 @ 10:26:57 AM AEST
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i liked this one before, but i like the changes you made...can't believe you were able to write it that quick!
your friend, kara |
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Re: Forgotten
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by mystical_illusion on
Wednesday, 19th February 2003 @ 05:10:07 PM AEST
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I loved your poem, full of emotion and very well put.
Always seem to relate so well to your poetry.
-kelly |
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Re: Forgotten
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by yellow_sundragon on
Friday, 21st February 2003 @ 12:54:59 AM AEST
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This is really good. It moved me to tears.... that is the classic example of my life...
Thank you for sharing this with us.... YS |
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Re: Forgotten
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by LadyDama on
Friday, 21st February 2003 @ 01:37:17 AM AEST
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| excellent imagery... beautifully sad poem... |
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Re: Forgotten
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by psyonara on
Friday, 21st February 2003 @ 05:58:23 AM AEST
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| beautiful, moved me deeply, i often feel similar. stay strong and don't stop writing! :) |
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Re: Forgotten
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by wolfflow on
Monday, 24th February 2003 @ 02:30:14 PM AEST
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| this is too real...... but also so beautiful in its honesty |
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Re: Forgotten
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by roisin on
Monday, 24th February 2003 @ 11:07:48 PM AEST
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EXCELLENT Joel!!!... vivid imagery....emotionally charged...your words continue to haunt me...an exceptional write!!!
your friend
rosie |
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Re: Forgotten
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by Vycky on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 01:32:06 AM AEST
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dude...wow...I'm stumped. It's just that great.
I love this poem. I'm so happy that I have found someone just like me... OK so not exactly like me but pretty dang close. Your poetry means so much to me, it makes me almost want to cry to know there's someone else out there just like me. And that I'm not alone.
Vycky |
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Re: Forgotten
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by deadly_blaZe on
Friday, 6th June 2003 @ 06:36:26 PM AEST
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Ill forever be a fan of your spine-tingling work
XxEricaxX |
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Re: Forgotten
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 10:10:09 PM AEST
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| very nice joel. im glad this was saved. very good indeedy. |
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