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Array ( [sid] => 127147 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => I Cannot See [time] => 2006-10-19 16:52:44 [hometext] => Another write from awhile back. [bodytext] =>

I cannot see
what you see.

I cannot see
me.

I'm lost out on the freeway
horns honking,
brakes screeching,
black marks are laid.
I'm not going to find my way back;
I'm afraid.

I do so .....
want to get back on track
empty this damn full sac
of troubles.
All the woes that weigh me down;
dump 'em on the ground.

Be free from doubt.
Be sane for awhile,
see what that's all about.

Wish I could see things
like you do.

Why am I plagued by so many fears?
I've cried so many tears.

Now....

I cannot see.

Laura Horner
2005 [comments] => 7 [counter] => 196 [topic] => 75 [informant] => deadheadpoet [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => anguished )

I Cannot See

Contributed by deadheadpoet on Thursday, 19th October 2006 @ 04:52:44 PM in AEST
Topic: anguished

I cannot see
what you see.

I cannot see
me.

I'm lost out on the freeway
horns honking,
brakes screeching,
black marks are laid.
I'm not going to find my way back;
I'm afraid.

I do so .....
want to get back on track
empty this damn full sac
of troubles.
All the woes that weigh me down;
dump 'em on the ground.

Be free from doubt.
Be sane for awhile,
see what that's all about.

Wish I could see things
like you do.

Why am I plagued by so many fears?
I've cried so many tears.

Now....

I cannot see.

Laura Horner
2005

Copyright © deadheadpoet ... [ 2006-10-19 16:52:44]
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Re: I Cannot See (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Thursday, 19th October 2006 @ 05:06:37 PM AEST
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aw sis ... how much "awhile back" was this ? I hope it is
not how you are feeling now hun. Such pain and fear
surround this write. I feel your torture, hun ~

Still .. an interesting and skilled piece it is. There is
much in here to gather and relate to.

*hugs*

~MG

Re: I Cannot See (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Thursday, 19th October 2006 @ 05:22:41 PM AEST
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SIs,

intense emotions run throughout this write.
It played out so very clearly, almost made my heart race at times........

I hope that those fears are leaving you now.

~Michelle~

Re: I Cannot See (User Rating: 1 )
by Shmokin on Thursday, 19th October 2006 @ 05:50:44 PM AEST
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excellent expression of passive frustration, nice write, thanx for sharing :-)

Re: I Cannot See (User Rating: 1 )
by Honey56 on Thursday, 19th October 2006 @ 07:16:28 PM AEST
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A very nice write...Time is the cure for all our fears...Pain...Time is golden i say...
Blessings always...
honey56

Re: I Cannot See (User Rating: 1 )
by Oneir8dude on Thursday, 19th October 2006 @ 10:31:36 PM AEST
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Oh! Laura! You made me really sad with this one...
But very well written... I thank You for letting
me see this side of you...

Thank You My friend

Bill

Re: I Cannot See (User Rating: 1 )
by one-curly-fry on Friday, 20th October 2006 @ 12:34:08 AM AEST
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Wow - I like this. The conversational tone, the use of words... it's a very good piece to give the reader the meaning while using a minimum of words. Very well done.
So many clever points in this - such as the first two stanzas and the forth and fifth.
Great write!

- Tim

Re: I Cannot See (User Rating: 1 )
by strawberryshortcake on Friday, 20th October 2006 @ 06:44:04 AM AEST
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whoa, this is really a great piece of work. i like the way it carries out. good flow.

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