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Array ( [sid] => 125457 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Perception of Me [time] => 2006-09-07 19:40:40 [hometext] => Last line is unfit for submission....I guess you will all have to use your imagination. [bodytext] => They say that I am beautiful
And thin and bright and sweet
They say the sky’s the limit
All the people that I meet

They say that I am lucky
For I have been so blessed
With piano virtuosity
The pride of the Midwest

They say that I have pretty eyes
And lovely auburn hair
They say that I should model
That nobody compares

They tell me I’m athletic
Strong, fast and agile
They say I am perfect
Extremely versatile

They say that I’ll be famous
In just a little bit
They say all that of me
A worthless piece of ****. [comments] => 5 [counter] => 241 [topic] => 61 [informant] => bobbyzimmerman [notes] => Mod 9 9/07/06 Please bleep the whole word. Thanks [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => selfstruggles )

Perception of Me

Contributed by bobbyzimmerman on Thursday, 7th September 2006 @ 07:40:40 PM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles

They say that I am beautiful
And thin and bright and sweet
They say the sky’s the limit
All the people that I meet

They say that I am lucky
For I have been so blessed
With piano virtuosity
The pride of the Midwest

They say that I have pretty eyes
And lovely auburn hair
They say that I should model
That nobody compares

They tell me I’m athletic
Strong, fast and agile
They say I am perfect
Extremely versatile

They say that I’ll be famous
In just a little bit
They say all that of me
A worthless piece of ****.

Copyright Â© bobbyzimmerman ... [ 2006-09-07 19:40:40]
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Re: Perception of Me (User Rating: 1 )
by twbanter on Thursday, 7th September 2006 @ 08:54:30 PM AEST
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Ohhhhh, Bobby.... You don't have to be ANY of those things, (even if you are) to be beautiful! That comes from within... Look in the mirror, and YOU tell yourself you are all these things! You probably are, but you need to learn how to take a compliment, for your own sake! And YES you have a sake.... I have one too, just can't remember where the hell I put it!!Dough!!!

Tom W

Re: Perception of Me (User Rating: 1 )
by twbanter on Thursday, 7th September 2006 @ 08:55:51 PM AEST
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PS Great poem. "I" say, you are also a talented writer!!!! Kudos...

Tom W

Re: Perception of Me (User Rating: 1 )
by lillyjane on Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 05:21:20 AM AEST
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I think you are all the things others say you are, they see it you cant you just need confidence in your self.. I dont have a lot of confidence either and we always criticize
our selves.. You right great poetry.. Dont say you dont lol.. xxx

Re: Perception of Me (User Rating: 1 )
by deadheadpoet on Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 12:13:41 PM AEST
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Dylan, (I feel the need to call you this now) Don't know your age or situation. I just know, it doesn't matter what other people think or want from you. You are the only one you need to please. Took quite awhile for me to decide to love myself...there are days I struggle, believe me. But it all has to start there. Look at the positives. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
Peace, Laura

Re: Perception of Me (User Rating: 1 )
by Fionndruinne on Saturday, 9th September 2006 @ 12:08:08 AM AEST
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This is very well done; the descriptive word-choices are excellent. I do think maybe a couple lines were maybe a little too overstated, the last line of the third stanza and the last two, maybe, of the next. Of course overstatement has its place, but I say this because the descriptions do such a good job painting praises that the more generic overstatement may be unnecessary.

An abrupt shift in the last line, but of course I see the use of that; perhaps something worded more as a personal feeling (you about yourself rather than something worded as if objectively) might be in order.

But that's enough of my pedantry. This is a powerful piece, and touches its readers. Hang in there. The best is yet to come, you know.

Andrew

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