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[aid] => mick
[title] => Shadow's Plight
[time] => 2006-09-01 17:23:04
[hometext] => Again, I'm not sure about the title... but whatever. I could not wait that long to post this. Phil xxx
[bodytext] => I never wish to speak again;
These foul words taint and spread the pain,
and thoughts, which only meant for good,
still burn as only fire could.
Now torn is what I have become.
These ragged ruins of myself,
are all that's left of who I was,
'fore I became a hollow shell.
And echoes riot through the grey,
through shadows where I now abide;
as my heart fights for words to say,
to friendly faces, from whom I hide.
For though I'm lost in shadows' plight,
my soul's still yearning for the light
and it's waiting for someone, anyone, to see,
this broken shadow, left bleeding...
...Is me...
[comments] => 18
[counter] => 492
[topic] => 48
[informant] => lostinmyself
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[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 30
[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => EmotionalPoetry
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Shadow's Plight
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 05:23:04 PM in AEST
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I never wish to speak again;
These foul words taint and spread the pain,
and thoughts, which only meant for good,
still burn as only fire could.
Now torn is what I have become.
These ragged ruins of myself,
are all that's left of who I was,
'fore I became a hollow shell.
And echoes riot through the grey,
through shadows where I now abide;
as my heart fights for words to say,
to friendly faces, from whom I hide.
For though I'm lost in shadows' plight,
my soul's still yearning for the light
and it's waiting for someone, anyone, to see,
this broken shadow, left bleeding...
...Is me...
Copyright ©
lostinmyself
... [
2006-09-01 17:23:04]
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by jerseysue on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 06:27:02 PM AEST
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This is such a heartfelt cry for help:
And echoes riot through the grey,
through shadows where I now abide;
as my heart fights for words to say,
to friendly faces, from whom I hide.
May I reply with:
Hiding never did anyone any good,
Perhaps you know it never would,
Shadows surround you, you are blue,
May light return, and with it YOU
Very skilfully written, It was full of feeling and emotion. Hugs. Sue x
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by twbanter on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 07:02:18 PM AEST
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Ohhh God! If you didn't just ripp out my own hearfelt feelings
and splay them out for all to see.
Killing the very esence of me
In a poem wrote so beautifully
and descriptively
That all could see
THAT was good! Nice job, Iv'e emotionally been there , infact I live there currently.... Unfortunately.
One of the best poems I've read on this site yet... But then, I may be biased....
To friendly faces, from whom I hide...
Yes, good stuff. An A+ here! Thank you for this poem
Tom W |
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by jyssvw22 on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 07:13:33 PM AEST
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This was a pure pleasure to read.
Nicely done
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by twbanter on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 07:40:46 PM AEST
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And the shadows fade
and return to blues
what's left I ask
And where's my due?
It's all for naught
as the poet already wrote
and will we ever be free
from our own insecurity?
Look what you started Broke!!!
Tom W |
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by ever1der on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 09:46:56 PM AEST
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| I love the pause at the end. It adds strength to the poem..which is like crystal; beautiful. |
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by emystar on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 10:20:13 PM AEST
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Sad but awesomely written.
Huggs,
emy |
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by allforyou on
Saturday, 2nd September 2006 @ 08:42:01 AM AEST
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| perfect |
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd September 2006 @ 07:33:39 PM AEST
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Oh my dearest friend ..
I feel shattered by this, hun. The ending is incredibly
distressing and severe.
It pains me to read something like this from you, sweets,
although, I must say, it's amazingly masterful.
An emotional work of art.
so beautifully painful
here for you~
*hugs*
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 3rd September 2006 @ 06:18:39 PM AEST
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my God Phil..
..so much pain - you segregate yourself needlessly my dear - and although I've only come closer to you in the last couple of months, I have become a better person for it - I, as I'm sure scores of others are, am here for you anytime you need an unbiased opinion or shoulder to lean on luv~
Be kind to yourself~
B.
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by secretwind on
Monday, 4th September 2006 @ 11:26:21 AM AEST
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I thought I heard you
moaning
here
in the shadows...
I feel you on this flow
well done. |
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 10th September 2006 @ 02:03:11 AM AEST
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Powerful lines, my friend. I'd like to echo Billy here - you have touched the lives of many of us, and I'm grateful for that. But, when it all comes down to the most basic of things, we fight, because life really is hard. And you fight well, and stubbornly, and I can't imagine that fight going unrewarded in the end. Keep fighting the good fight.
Blessings.
Andrew |
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by Willofree on
Monday, 11th September 2006 @ 06:46:59 PM AEST
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Phil,
What a beautiful creative piece, a real work of art. The way your words are woven together is so impressive. There is mystery and drama and mystique. The search for one's self, and the plight for self discovery, a very daunting quest.
Well done, Philly
Will |
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by Sparda on
Sunday, 17th September 2006 @ 10:06:57 AM AEST
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Nice Job, dude..Ima check out all ur work now, heh
Im writing something similar at the moment, I spose this is the end product of difficult relationships...
Anyways, keep writing...
-Sparda-
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 21st September 2006 @ 12:52:50 AM AEST
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Omg Philly
I hope your doing ok?
this write is so deep and emotional
It made me sad just reading it.
you ever need to talk i am here for you girl
take care
love ya hugs |
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 26th September 2006 @ 05:17:54 PM AEST
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Aw noes, I'm so, so incredibly sorry I haven't dropped by to your page in yonks.
I seriously regret that now.
This piece is.. full of woah's.You know? Woah's. Lots of them.
I love the way it seems quiet, yet strong.
I'm not sure I can explain that any better,
maybe it's the physical appearance of the poem
that makes it seem small and little,
and the words and feelings it portrays are
so powerful.. now that is an amazing contrast there.
My favourite line would have to be, "And echoes riot through the grey."
Probably because you've personified echoes and made them riot,
because well.. usually they just - echo.
I could totally lose myself in this.
*hugglies you*
Stay strong Philly, I'm here if you ever need to talk too.
Thankies for sharing. :)
Kaitlyn.
[off to re-read]
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th October 2006 @ 07:42:53 AM AEST
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I've said it before, but it's so appropriate here....It always seems pain brings out the best writes in us.
God, You are awfully good!!
and by the way, don't ever forget who has shared that room with you, often there are more than one shadow in a dark room.
Hugs lil sis. |
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 09:11:02 AM AEST
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I hope that you are okay and staying strong.. I think that you are an amazing poet and that your poems are very well written and very beautiful and full of emotions... This poem made me think about myself and how I can relate to this... It made me sad yet again I thought it was beautiful... Great poem..
Take care
Hugs
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Re: Shadow's Plight
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by tiggytom on
Friday, 14th December 2007 @ 10:33:06 AM AEST
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Nice emotinal read, good stuff
Tom |
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