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Array ( [sid] => 124430 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Ayattiwi Breakdown [time] => 2006-08-14 01:02:39 [hometext] => this is a three part peom/song i wrote a while back.. all three parts in one post. gosh i miss hayden. [bodytext] => Ayattiwi Breakdown pt.I

so now what am i going to do?
cry about the past
the past we never had
now i know it'll never be
you and me
never
but i dont know what i'll do
with out you
part of me died
inside
you're what kept me hangin' on
what'll i do now it's gone
gone, the hope of someday
why you say those things
you know
you know that hurt me
i'll never know
but now i guess we just cant even be friends
now i'm alone
alone in this world with nothing

Ayattwi Breakdown pt.II(Trapt)

trapt in my head
with nothing good
no sunshine
no way out of the grim darkness
no will to hold on to the edge
to keep from falling
de-deeper
and deeper down
no way out
thoughts of you were the candel
taht showed me how to unlock the door
& let myslef live
open'd the blinds
to see out the window
& see the light shining in
you've doused my candel
shattered my window
barred my door
now way out
now i got no way out
no way out of this darkness
no way out no way out no way out
no way out of this darkness
trapt, trapt, trapt,
with no way out of this darkness

Ayattwi Breakdown pt.3: "The End" Doenst Mean The End Of Pain (Broken)

first
of the last
rips at the heart
tender and tense
fresh wounds
tight in your chest
dont touch it
anything and everything
causes pain

the sting of the antispetisizing
words that need to be said
making everything come up
and hurt again
cant take it
twist it out
burst in a bloody mess

then it's left
battered beaten & broken
soft and weak
dont want to feel
washed wet blood
no scabs or scars to hide the pain
a faction of what it once was
can never love as much anymore [comments] => 1 [counter] => 207 [topic] => 22 [informant] => dryice923 [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 0 [associated] => [topicname] => LostLove )

Ayattiwi Breakdown

Contributed by dryice923 on Monday, 14th August 2006 @ 01:02:39 AM in AEST
Topic: LostLove

Ayattiwi Breakdown pt.I

so now what am i going to do?
cry about the past
the past we never had
now i know it'll never be
you and me
never
but i dont know what i'll do
with out you
part of me died
inside
you're what kept me hangin' on
what'll i do now it's gone
gone, the hope of someday
why you say those things
you know
you know that hurt me
i'll never know
but now i guess we just cant even be friends
now i'm alone
alone in this world with nothing

Ayattwi Breakdown pt.II(Trapt)

trapt in my head
with nothing good
no sunshine
no way out of the grim darkness
no will to hold on to the edge
to keep from falling
de-deeper
and deeper down
no way out
thoughts of you were the candel
taht showed me how to unlock the door
& let myslef live
open'd the blinds
to see out the window
& see the light shining in
you've doused my candel
shattered my window
barred my door
now way out
now i got no way out
no way out of this darkness
no way out no way out no way out
no way out of this darkness
trapt, trapt, trapt,
with no way out of this darkness

Ayattwi Breakdown pt.3: "The End" Doenst Mean The End Of Pain (Broken)

first
of the last
rips at the heart
tender and tense
fresh wounds
tight in your chest
dont touch it
anything and everything
causes pain

the sting of the antispetisizing
words that need to be said
making everything come up
and hurt again
cant take it
twist it out
burst in a bloody mess

then it's left
battered beaten & broken
soft and weak
dont want to feel
washed wet blood
no scabs or scars to hide the pain
a faction of what it once was
can never love as much anymore

Copyright © dryice923 ... [ 2006-08-14 01:02:39]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Ayattiwi Breakdown (User Rating: 1 )
by The_Unknown on Tuesday, 15th August 2006 @ 11:40:38 AM AEST
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that was a pretty good write. I'm sorry you feel this way, hope everything gets better.
good write, keep it up.
luvs ya!
jess

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