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Revery
Contributed by
wizard
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Sunday, 13th August 2006 @ 02:15:19 AM in AEST
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Today, the day of Heaven’s dream
As lonely visions cross the listless sky;
Or merely a day where beauty gleams
Cast upon a wandering eye
A docile soul in gentle sway
Has crossed this path again,
Endless dreams for another day
As happens now and then
A sunset glow torn asunder,
Another day…lost for love
Without a moment of solace under
The baneful rays shone from above
Sunset’s glow and dreams fade away
Across a jaded twilight sky,
With an intermittent chance which may
Hold a dream which for once shan’t die
Copyright ©
wizard
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2006-08-13 02:15:19]
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Re: Revery
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by jerseysue on
Sunday, 13th August 2006 @ 05:08:10 AM AEST
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Wonders seen by ones own eye,
Upon the heavens, we call the sky,
A beauty that is ours to see,
We gaze in wonderment at what it be.
This is so beautiful, and quite visual. Thanks for sharing. Sue x |
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Re: Revery
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by Shmokin on
Sunday, 13th August 2006 @ 06:10:58 AM AEST
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| pleasent little read, nice :-) |
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Re: Revery
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 13th August 2006 @ 06:32:38 PM AEST
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Wow, Wiz.
I love this. I read it in silence and aloud and each time I did I liked it even more.
I think that the first and second stanzas are best.
Beautiful writing.
Phil xxx |
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Re: Revery
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th August 2006 @ 10:17:46 PM AEST
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Hey, Paul, you did beauty and serenity with such vivid clarity in this write that it just whispers a song to the soul. I'm in awe! You and Billy and Spike, I could read you guys all day! All three of ya need to get books of your works published. That's a fact!
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: Revery
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 14th August 2006 @ 12:29:47 AM AEST
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I agree with Kenmore on this one.
You did an excellent hod on this write.
A sunset glow torn asunder,
Another day…lost for love
Without a moment of solace under
The baneful rays shone from above
I just love that part
amazing
hugs |
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Re: Revery
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by lillyjane on
Monday, 14th August 2006 @ 10:51:06 AM AEST
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| So beautiful really enjoyed reading it.. xxxx |
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Re: Revery
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 14th August 2006 @ 08:29:18 PM AEST
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The title is perfect bro-
..only in "Revery" could one conceive such things..
and I have to say, (while speaking for others here as well, I'm sure) that I've missed your work..
..pleased, if you post more!
Till the AM~
B |
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Re: Revery
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by jyssvw22 on
Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 11:07:47 AM AEST
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This felt smooth to my eyes, as the read was pleasurable with no hurry and no interruptions.
Nicely written
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Re: Revery
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 20th August 2006 @ 09:50:13 PM AEST
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Listening to anyone's opinion on the matter is akin to wholeheartedly believing the weatherman on a daily basis. There will, undoubtedly, come a day when you're caught without your umbrella (for having anticipated clear skies) as a thunderstorm rolls in and changes everything. Those weatherman keep track of their accuracy rate, of course --- but I'm inclined to suggest it's their margin of error that offers hope. Invitably there will be that unpredicted rain.... and when it comes, ah!!! go right on ahead and dance in it, friend!
Drenched,
~Snem
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Re: Revery
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 11th December 2006 @ 11:00:09 PM AEST
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OOps, how did I come to miss this magical masterpiece by you dearest Wiz? I need to get my heads outta the clouds, lol. So sorry to have come so late to this :-(
Sunset’s glow and dreams fade away
Across a jaded twilight sky,
With an intermittent chance which may
Hold a dream which for once shan’t die
I pray that your most wished for dreams come true my dear friend.
Breath taking and beautiful are your wonderful words ascribed onto this page~
A pleasure to read your work. Thanks so much for posting this beautiful masterpiece.
love n hugs,
sue m |
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